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Strickly BuSiness
^^^read da title.....dis is strickly business.....lets go
niggas all about liftin glocks, when half dey guns "hold no keys" so dey weapons "locked"... "religious gats" that "uplift a shot", bodies quick 2 drop, afta bein "submerged in blood" like "liquid clots"... broke niggas brag but don't hold no knots, blank image don't get ya photo shot, PreZ not slow...u'll get "punched in time" like an "abusive watch"... mental collapses, u might wanna "fall back" i got a "clumsy past"... mouth moved?? son u'll get harassed, hungry enuff 2 "empty stomachs" 4 weeks n force ya "esophagus 2 fast!"... u faggots "RuPaul on da inside"....on da outside u jus "look like a man!"... high profit....when i spit my lyrics da ppl demand, dis "jerk" not cass but got "split personalities" cuz he like to "switch hands!"... short free, da niggas "below comprehension" probably wont "UNDERstand"... imma newbie but if u readin it like "damn" then jus reply 2 it man!... foreal dont peep n leave, real rec real...1ne |
Real nice one hear fam...Good read...Nice multies and punches...structure was off but I could follow it...Good shit fam...Get at me for a collab...1
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Nice shit man.........u wanna be in a crew Im finna start or do u wanna battle
scream at me |
This was dope. I found it kind of hard to follow but you had some good multis.
step up your vocab and work on your structure. Other than that it was dope.. 7/10 Sweft Oh, read "NOW, ask me why Im in TC" I have a link under my sig. ACTUALLY read it and leave some feed back. it will be worth the read or you can clown on me! (LoL) late |
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preciate da luv fam......i feel u about da structure.........i was just typin up a quick free so i dunno, i just did whateva........but i'm down for dat collab just lemme know da details |
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preciate da luv gunz..........after our battle get at me about dat crew aight |
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preciate dat constructive criticism fam, nodoubt.......imma read ur link rite now and reply on it namean |
http://community.RAPVERSE.COM/showthread.php?p=2092510
yooo read it iight! MAN I AM SO UNDER-RATED! Sweft |
^^i noticed dat, u had 2 reply 2 ur own post namean........but keep doin u ya shits tight
UPPIN DIS, reply niggas |
Hm.. this was a pretty decent drop..
Not much ..but it was something... you used some pretty dope punchlines.. some nice vocab , and nice wordplay, structure was UGH! ,try to match up your bars homie.. Not have them look like a heart pace.. overall keep it up , ... this was a decent drop.. not a topical piece..but more of a freestyle.. keep it up , and hope to see some more work from you in the future.. PS:Dropa link to an OM' you have left good feedback on or this will be closed |
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=186928
good looks bonecollector...i'ma get anotha link if its necessary |
kinda old........................many views no replies....................gimme feedback
P.S. I KNOW DA STRUCTURE IS FUCKED UP...DIS IS OLD!!! |
ollllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllld drop lol scream at it again niggas
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nice punchlines and multi's i was feelin it 8/10
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chea fam preciate your reply since no one else did, blah!
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