Reflekt vs .Daillestinjerz.
 

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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-11-05 at 02:57 PM

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.Daillestinjerz. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 02:36 PM.

Reflekt has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 02:56 PM.

Loud mouth muffucker im here to stop these lames,
if u a gangsta muffucker im bout to check u like a hockey game
Its no love bitch yea im disrespectin ya ass,
u prolly had a shitty child hood i cud tell cuz ur rymes r REFLEKTIN ur past.
This kids a young buck, let alone a dumb fuck,
and u garbage muffucker soo u get taken out in a dump truck
If the call gets made to take u out im tha shooter,
cuz my gunz constantly got hands on'em like tha mouse on a computer
When we fight bitch dont worry bout wut im holdin on me,
i guess battlin new jacks gets this kid feelin good like he rollin on E
wen we done his eyes el b to swollen to see,
he wants to b a rapper but a bitch is wut hes goin to be.

you standing in my way..the only thing thats tryna hinder
me..so when im done my lyrics leave .da illest injer(injured)
your 10 posts that you did is the closest you'll ever come to being perfect
cause dudes punches are slow to connect like dial-up service
gettin pm's from u sayin check in..ho gimme a second
wanna test this?..but you only fire blanks like ya record*
man you nothing to me..you might got 50 cents..but thats only a lil bit
the only things to come outta jersey are big headed lil kidd's**
im like a mc doctor if ya peep the way my lyrics tear through your anatomy
your verse is nothing but littered with more filler than a mouth infested with cavities
now when da illest jumps off stage is the only time they ever turn you up
why bother with new jersey?..when miami already burned you up***

*his record is 0-0
**big head lil kidd's..jason kidd is from the new jersey nets
***Miami beat NJ in the NBA playoffs

Voted For: Reflekt

you standing in my way..the only thing thats tryna hinder
me..so when im done my lyrics leave .da illest injer(injured)
^^weak wordplay here...5/10
your 10 posts that you did is the closest you'll ever come to being perfect
cause dudes punches are slow to connect like dial-up service
^^Played as fuck....2/10
gettin pm's from u sayin check in..ho gimme a second
wanna test this?..but you only fire blanks like ya record*
^^Ok.......a lil uoriginal rip on record tho...5/10
man you nothing to me..you might got 50 cents..but thats only a lil bit
the only things to come outta jersey are big headed lil kidd's**
^^1st line was good,2nd sucked...4/10
im like a mc doctor if ya peep the way my lyrics tear through your anatomy
your verse is nothing but littered with more filler than a mouth infested with cavities
^^Basic.....3/10
now when da illest jumps off stage is the only time they ever turn you up
why bother with new jersey?..when miami already burned you up***
^^ok....4/10

Ight...mediocre verse here...shows you can use some elevation.I saw you make some attempts on wordplay with the 1st bar/injer....but it wasn't executed well.Had too many played lines..like the dial up one and cavities.Then there are the flat out basic lines like the record one.So just work on creativity,complexity,and wordplay.But at least all of your bars had punches.

Loud mouth muffucker im here to stop these lames,
if u a gangsta muffucker im bout to check u like a hockey game
^^Not much of a punch tho...0/10
Its no love bitch yea im disrespectin ya ass,
u prolly had a shitty child hood i cud tell cuz ur rymes r REFLEKTIN ur past.
^^hmm...Ok..a personal at least...a generous 4/10
This kids a young buck, let alone a dumb fuck,
and u garbage muffucker soo u get taken out in a dump truck
^^basic as fuck....1/10
If the call gets made to take u out im tha shooter,
cuz my gunz constantly got hands on'em like tha mouse on a computer
^^Not much of a punch..good concept with hands/mouse...but you talking about your guns..as opposed to dissing...1/10
When we fight bitch dont worry bout wut im holdin on me,
i guess battlin new jacks gets this kid feelin good like he rollin on E
^Flowed bad.....weak punch...3/10
wen we done his eyes el b to swollen to see,
he wants to b a rapper but a bitch is wut hes goin to be.
^^basic as fuck

Ok...bad verse man.Too basic.Every line,except the mouse one was basic.As for the mouse line..you coulda said his mother's ass always got hands on it like a mouse or something.You gotta make it diss.You can't go talkin about your guns and shit.And get complex with your rhymes.

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Voted For: Reflekt

Loud mouth muffucker im here to stop these lames,
if u a gangsta muffucker im bout to check u like a hockey game
^weak opener...had bad flow to it 3/10^
Its no love bitch yea im disrespectin ya ass,
u prolly had a shitty child hood i cud tell cuz ur rymes r REFLEKTIN ur past.
^Bad personal....didnt really hit hard at all 2/10^
This kids a young buck, let alone a dumb fuck,
and u garbage muffucker soo u get taken out in a dump truck
^Basic rhyme scheme lack of wordplay 1/10^
If the call gets made to take u out im tha shooter,
cuz my gunz constantly got hands on'em like tha mouse on a computer
^Not a bad reference....good comparison....good diss 5/10^
When we fight bitch dont worry bout wut im holdin on me,
i guess battlin new jacks gets this kid feelin good like he rollin on E
^what? didnt make sence nor contributed to ur verse 1/10^
wen we done his eyes el b to swollen to see,
he wants to b a rapper but a bitch is wut hes goin to be.
^Weak closer not good, easy rhyme scheme 2/10^

Over all ur structure is off point, try making ur lines end up at the same pont for better structure and better flow....ur rhyme scheme was basic...up on ur vocab to enhnace the flow/verse itself....and make sure ur verse has multis....so it also enhances ur verse

you standing in my way..the only thing thats tryna hinder
me..so when im done my lyrics leave .da illest injer(injured)
^Nice opener....4/10^
your 10 posts that you did is the closest you'll ever come to being perfect
cause dudes punches are slow to connect like dial-up service
^very nice diss...hard hitting, liked it a lot 6/10^
gettin pm's from u sayin check in..ho gimme a second
wanna test this?..but you only fire blanks like ya record*
^ok diss, was iight simple rhyme scheme 5/10^
man you nothing to me..you might got 50 cents..but thats only a lil bit
the only things to come outta jersey are big headed lil kidd's**
^HAHA made me laugh nice punch right here 8/10^
im like a mc doctor if ya peep the way my lyrics tear through your anatomy
your verse is nothing but littered with more filler than a mouth infested with cavities
^Good comparison nice job on this 5/10^
now when da illest jumps off stage is the only time they ever turn you up
why bother with new jersey?..when miami already burned you up***
^Good reference it hit hard and nice closer 6/10^

Over all, i liked this...but work on your structure to get each word end up at the same point at the end of one line, up on ur multis so it makes ur verse flow better and just be more enjoyable to read....ur vocab can be upped but it was ok in this becuz u had hard hitting punches

V/REFLEKT

RTF since i was kind to peep and analyze yours :thumbup:

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y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

^who the heck are you? but thats cool. i know it was.

Voted For: Reflekt

damn...this was a nice battle...and a very close one yo...

i looked at both competitors punches and i said...nah they both got that...personals were both decent...but then i tryed to consider both structures but i guess reflekt gets my vote for this...yeah both of u had gd irony and kept y'all punches hittin harder and harder...but reflekt's verse had more flow than daillest's...this was a nice battle tho and props to both...keep doin ur thang..

drop honest and well xplained votes on 1 of my battles cos i did the same here....thanx a lot

This was feedback posted for Reflekt
 

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Voted For: Reflekt

lol Illest had one pretty good name play personal... but Reflekt had more and harder hitting ones... He just flat out hit harder in this battle... I gotta give em to em off the strength of that... that and they're were close in just about every other catagory...

Opener: Reflekt
Closer: Reflekt (even though it was a forced personal)
Punches: Reflekt
Personals: Reflekt
Creativity: Refleft
Complexity: Reflekt

Vote: Reflekt

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Reflekt took this battle.. would vote, but I'm too lazy now.

Voted For: Reflekt

Loud mouth muffucker im here to stop these lames,
if u a gangsta muffucker im bout to check u like a hockey game
^no
Its no love bitch yea im disrespectin ya ass,
u prolly had a shitty child hood i cud tell cuz ur rymes r REFLEKTIN ur past.
^no
This kids a young buck, let alone a dumb fuck,
and u garbage muffucker soo u get taken out in a dump truck
^uh no
If the call gets made to take u out im tha shooter,
cuz my gunz constantly got hands on'em like tha mouse on a computer
^nah
When we fight bitch dont worry bout wut im holdin on me,
i guess battlin new jacks gets this kid feelin good like he rollin on E
^no
wen we done his eyes el b to swollen to see,
he wants to b a rapper but a bitch is wut hes goin to be.
^uh no

you standing in my way..the only thing thats tryna hinder
me..so when im done my lyrics leave .da illest injer(injured)
^ok
your 10 posts that you did is the closest you'll ever come to being perfect
cause dudes punches are slow to connect like dial-up service
^good
gettin pm's from u sayin check in..ho gimme a second
wanna test this?..but you only fire blanks like ya record*
^nice
man you nothing to me..you might got 50 cents..but thats only a lil bit
the only things to come outta jersey are big headed lil kidd's**
^nah
im like a mc doctor if ya peep the way my lyrics tear through your anatomy
your verse is nothing but littered with more filler than a mouth infested with cavities
^good
now when da illest jumps off stage is the only time they ever turn you up
why bother with new jersey?..when miami already burned you up***
^ok

V/Reflekt