"Born Alone"
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/4/indeph90_music.htm

aight I need to know whats good and bad about the song.

I'm just gettin exclusive to audio so I gotta start somewhere.


beat is mobb deep's "get away"

oh I think i gotta leave links so I'ma edit later.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198963

if you peep I'd luh you nahm sayins?

listening to indpehs-born alone....

ok jus had to get this out of the way ...QUALITY IS SHITTTTTT, its gaping ass vagina shitt dick fuck cunt bitch tits....

flow/rhyme scheme-flow is pretty straight....its smooth for the most part, im feeling it, rhyme scheme is good, oyu switch it up and dont jus go a/b scheme like a lotta cats. ya didnt rush or slow down to fit ya words in nice...

delivery/riding the beat- aight this is where i thin you lackin son...for one up ya delivery, i know you got balls i hear you in the yahoo chat room son , use em....i know you can unleash ya emotion on a track so DOO IT!!. there was only one time ya emotion was good you yelled "OHH SHIT!! and im like who cares" but most of hte time you were kinda monotone. put ya whole voice into it not jus one part of it.

pronunciation/breathe control- good on both from what i can hear....but i cant hear much cause of your SHITTY ASS FAG QUALITY!!!!...let me produce ya tracks ill do wonders

lyrics and style- this is no problem for you, i heard you on yahoo saying that you want to be unique you want every line to be a hott line ect....so jus kee p doin you....YOU HAVE FAGGOT GAY DICK RETARD QUALITTY!!!...excuse my tarretts

what to work on- riding the beat/delivery, EMOTION....and last but not least............................................. .................................................. .....
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.ya mutha fuckin quality

your better than dabatos

thanks that actually helped me :) word@people imitating your feed in 3 different ways after this.--__--

and I am better then dabatos :o

word see I told you deph, your quality sucks ass yo. But yo I got you wit feed on this, once I got my audio driver back.

yea fuck repeditive girl songs :)

yo weird ta hear ur vioce dawg....quality wacker than mine even...but anyway besides that ur flow is dope and ur lyrics are deep dawg...defitnly feelin this shit...coulda been better but defitnly not bad....7.5/10...yo RTF on my shitty ass flow shit i posted up..Still Incomplete...lol i still need ta elevate but tell me what ya think

yea quality is butt...
but the track itself is hot, which obviously means a lot more...

but yea ya flow was on the whole time i though
ya lyrics is coo
i say you work on ya emotion though...
now im not one to talk really, cause im kinda in the same boat as you as far as emotion goes...but i think if yours was upped, this track would be a whole lot nicer...

quality you cant do much about, work with what you got...so really i say focus on emotion and your ish will sound a lot better...
nice track though, i was feelin it...

thank you tizzle! people forgot about rap =/

Yo everybody play it on Lo fi it sounds better.Thats how I hear the song.

iight listenin..

yeah hard beat now lets see what you say...
oh man quality scared the shit outta me homie loud ass vocals man...quality is ass you need to step up ya equipment cuz you flowin smooth man and ya lyrics good...nice way to end ya verse..good multis and shit coo coo lets see if theres a 2nd verse..yeah damn...shits too loud homie..lol and ya mic prescense could of been better..but you choppin good wit the beat..i like that line im the only nigga dreamin of sleep....nice ..good track overall i'll give ya a 6/10 just try gettin better equipment man iight..1ne..

thanks man :D at least ya'll think i'ma good rapper :)

upp this :(....

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This is good... glad i didn't hear any punchlines, cause thats gay on tracks. Mostly what you need to work with if your flow at some points, if you have to force it out then just change something up, naaaaaaah mean? Wordox...