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Who's That
Like a game of cards, I play my deck smart... Their's always one shark, trying to, ace'me for my hearts... Yet i play hard, cause I made my mark... I'm gonna walk, i'm not losing to these retards... Please God won't you cease of these weak talks... Who speak bulk but tease like freak broads... You need halls for reaching your peak your tones wrong... You breathe soft for even thinking your speech is long... Seek my slong cause that's where your throat belongs... Beneath it all your just a pipsqueak that sleeps in thongs... In feet i'm tall to see you your point of view is small... Believe dogg we easily bleed as i recall... Up and down like a seesaw nothings what you seen or saw... I sheathe a saw I seize while I seethe feel my claws... You can't sheek your flaws from me I've seen'um all... Geeks fall when they try to creep n crawl how sneaks stalk... "Who's that" Cham, Cham "Who's back" Cham, Cham I'ma keep moving I'ma keep Improving I'ma keep choosing what i'm doing... Yeah The New Wicked One Yall... |
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this was ok, flow was alright, vocab was pretty good though, content was good, keep it up man
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Upppppppppppppppppiiiiiiiiinnnnn..........For More Feed.........
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uhh....this was an o.k drop....needs some work....especially on your flow and your vocab these were to basic...rhyme scheme was also too basic....work on that and your rhymes will improve.......
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Aight...Aight...Honest feed at least...Anyways Uppinnnn this still...
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Aight.........hmmmm............UPPIN!.............
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yo man i honestly loved this its good shit 10/10 ok good flow vocab not a problem multis were spectacular everything perfect it made me laugh the made me think.....it was a learning experience for real man .........rtf on my om's give some pointers if u would....1
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erm...aight drop give it 6/10 need to work on expandin ya vocab an flow good try keep up
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Yeah homey. The joint was okay. I would say probly a 6 or a 7, but thats neither here or there. Audio wise, it would probly cum across different....better. But you know, next time you gotta write that shit so even when cats read it they can vibe on the flow and rhyme that shit easily. You need to cater to the reader and realize that someone gone read this joint so let me use a better point of view so they get the flow and understand it. When cats say ya vocab they mean that shit is to together, but its only because they readin it and not listenin to it. Overall, the joint was okay, could be better, but overall a descent verse. Keep goin playboy.
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