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ayo....
a menace wit mine//a dentist at times//crack ya in the mouth like several times//nuff blunt force trauma to sever ya spine//clever wit, lines my mindstate?,the boy been upstate wit the shanks and the wine//a fuckin ruffneck,fuck respect cuz u know dat state time...don't give it to me mufucka uma take mine//no time to waste, never know when my times up//ain't talkin bout death,i'm on parole til 09 fuck//still give u a cold nine or snub to da temple til ya whole mind is sludge........


off tops

Man, you're DOPE.

But seriously, you need to work on everything. Practice.

good look and advice homie

you need some structure bro, flow is off often, build your lines like this:

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ya know what I meen, keep dropin

see why cant we have more new people who take constructive criticism this well? but yea the first thing u need to work on is your structure, if u continue to drop open mics we'll go from there.and u need to leave feed on two other OM's and then post the links here or this will be closed

at least you got multies so it flows koo

You need to leave 2 links to other peoples open mics that you have left solid feedback on.


I will leave feedback once you have posted your links.

no links and you posted a second open mic.


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