Fux - At Home
 

Sit back, clear ur mind...... get ready for the story

peep it...... and ive been sick the past 2 weeks or so, but i couldnt wait any longer to spit this shit, so i sed fuck it and recorded it....... so the voice might be alil messed up, but its the message i want yall to hear

http://www.soundclick.com/olascripts

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2693079

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2693082

I'm not feeling this beat. It sounds like background music, not a rap beat. I can imagine scrolling through the menu of a video game and hearing this music playing.

neway...Your flow fits this beat perfectly...delivery isn't bad


I'm not really followiing the story much, just the flow and delivery.

This track sounded solid, with well thought out lyrics.



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dope shit for real....

good job...youve elevated like hell.....

werd, thanx...... and Q, i was thinkin about usin a diff beat that i found, that might work better, and its the same tempo as the other one, so i might use it instead

u come in real quik flow is a lil forced but solid ..i personally like the beat its unique hook works good.. best part ..but i agree with q the story is a lil choppy but i think i understand where ya comin from and what u tried to accomplish cuz i personally love story tracks so real nice job

listenin...

...vocals is a lil loud...like ike said yur shit si gettin better...i see this trakk is showin your versatility...good story...maybe a lil mroe emotion could be used tho...flow is decent overall...not bad, kep it up...

could ya rtf
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224660

you sound a lot like LL cool j....weird....great track....good beat, flow, and delivery....8/10

rtf
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224099

nice beat its a dope and i love when the woman vioce comes in....really good story telling..delivery is dope very smooth...the flows on point..the hook is VERY nice i love the hook..damn very nice i think this is one of my fav songs off of rv no lyin..i didnt even know u do audio man...anyways i'd give this a 9/10 very smooth song i LOVE the message this outshines almost every song on rv when it comes to the message...pc

Damn I just recorded to this beat lol. Wrod it;s raw. You came crazy on it man. From your old shit to now you got way better. Just do my beat justice. lol

I like the beat, but I don't think it really works for this song. Flow is really nice on this one. So is the quality.....you really stepped your game up from the last time I heard you. Hook was nice. Good story man......I'm feeling this shit. The beat starts to fit a little more as the song goes on....I think it's just a crappy intro to the track :thumbup:™

Good shit man.....

Dope track in my ears. the production sounds very very crisp. nice job showin ya versatility and while telling a story. i think this track puts you in a advance catagorey. i got free beats for you at www.verbalvendetta.com dope line bout th 13th birthday and how it always gets forgotten.. nice track man keep it up.

good shit..... and can someone tell me if they like the addition at the end?????? the H O M E at the very end......

damn, fuck u bitches

Sweet beat man, where you got this shit? It's dope. The verse is fine, I'm digging the flow and the quality. The lyrics are tight, I'm feeling them bro. Real straight shit. The chorus is good, a bit catchy but not so catchy lol, kinda like the melody you use but not the lyric part. Anyways the track is hot bro. Props!

pz
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...836#post2695836

listening through audio technica ATH M40fs's

Beat is uber slow. Lay some slllliiiggghhhhtt reverb on your vocals so the blend int othe beat a little more. The hooks nice, but the lyrics, I guess I'll have to hear the end of the story to say wether they worked or not. The first verse built up pretty nicely. The hook is ill. The flow is on point.

Story ended pretty well and at one point consistent to the story. I like the come bakc into the h o m e fade out on the hook. Pretty ill track cept for the abrasive vocals imo.


oh yeah, can you RTF here by editing your old feedback :D :http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225008