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B.I. detained & Sphere vs. Aisle 5 & Emerge
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I'm putting the In in Win.
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i see emerge got a normal name lol |
These bitchs offa the shelf so imma serve with a smile
N shits getting dirty so im wiping the floor in this aisle Emerges in denial….he aint shit since he lost his colon Now hes fulla himself since he aint let it out in so long I wont feed cus youl both be killin yaselfs in one click Aisles there..….and Emerge breaks down his own shit Its just sick how aisle 5's got the specials…..no doubt This is own one get one free....n its why there sold out Both wishin you were asian…….you better get runnin Cus just like Brett Favre…you aint seen wats commin Emerge and A-ilse are by Far Lands Apart.. ..how can Emerge be a Mod… wen he aint even Mastered the Art. Put 2gether like a Horse & Cart..N that’s bein Kind ..coz even tho ya go well Together.. ………Theres still 1 clinging from Behind a HERBAL Divide..seperating Vanilla from Cube ..they wanted to be Underground.. ….so I made these Fools take the Tube well hey I’m Brixton..Predictin ya Text like Weather ..MC81 equals Aisles Origanlity... …well Basically… ………………………………………Never Herb-Immortality Forever..High-Landing over Tu Cents only time ya’ll Ahead of the Game …….was to get Push Forward by the Defence!!! |
To Sphere and a bit of Brix...
Another n00b? That's real gay yo, my advice is to lay low getting the wind knocked outta you.. better yet, a tornado! What... another alias? Might I add a nice n witty check in Damn Brix... I've seen better structure..... following 9/11! I hand out deserved compliments, so to BI thats nothing Cause I admit, Brixton's pretty............ pretty damn ugly! Without a valid argument....... you could say Aisle's beat While I'm givin you your own shoutout.. to say the least Haven't read your verses.. a play off my name's expected They say pains a beautiful thing... So consider yourself RB's Carmen Electra! |
It's 11:05 so I came to key something real quick before it turns to 12:00
Brixton was horrible so I dissed him for Aisle 5 with no refrain There's nothing behind your bars, yet you still remain Detained! Peasantry must be dope, ill, and sick... ..................................to be repping a two man clique & Origin wants to put the past behind him so he dissapeared quick! B.I. isn't half the man his partner is...... ..............................even his sig says he's hemisphere!!! And I thought his lyrics were straight... .......................till Speek E Z made him look like a queer! A wack M-M verse it's a fact...his aplication's will soon retrack They tried to spit some hot shit at the thread.... .......................................but the thread spit it back I was really sad . . . that you guys could not provide in strife Finally your sig shows purpose cuz after you lose...... ......you'll just say "I'm Content with the shitty things in life" |
Damn, we're the only battle to show.
Votes please? |
BEFORE I SAY THIS: YOU FUCKS HAD BETTER READ ALL OF THE FEEDBACK, AND FOLLOW IT. IM TIRED OF GIVING GOOD FEEDBACK THATS IGNORED.
B.I. detained, or whoever did the first verse: playing off of aisles name is just that, played. its not really interesting to read anymore. didnt earn you any points by including anything about aisles as in grocery aisles... another tip, dont just state facts.. stating facts about your opponent is basically filler. make it into a dope punchline. Second verse: that structure is getting old. put everything on the same line.. unless it "needs" the drama that comes from having to wait longer to read the next line. having that style without any good punches is a big dissapointment.. why? because being ready for a punch in the next line, and that it not coming, after the extra wait is no fun to read. . Aisle: Don't ever come played like that again. you are a vet. played: "to say the least". played: anything 9/11 ish. It would be different if you hadnt heard lines including "to say the least" 500 times... but we all know you have. no big deal as youd have won this anyway. The pretty damn ugly line was ok, and the tornado line was ok..nuthin spectacular...stop half assin it. Emerge: Your style is extremely hard to read. you should form your lines in one sentence, or at least one string of ideas. And stop making one of your lines ten times as long as the other, it greatly interrupts the flow. When i reread your lines just now, and ignored the horrible structure and just looked at the punch part (for those which had punches), they actually seemed half decent, a few good ones. if you reform your structure and even out your lines, you will be much better. V/ aisle & Emerge. |
Thanks for the vote Feeble.
I always half ass my shit, that was like a 10 minute keystyle. I'm still shaking off some rust too, as I haven't battled on a regular basis since LLL, and now that it's coming back I'll get into my groove. :thumbup: |
lol at my feed..get at me on aim to describe to me what you meant better...im
not sure i complete comprehended it....anyway thanks for the good feedback Sphere put back your fucking sig!!!!! |
Im not going to break down all .. im tired.
Aisle, & emerge had the better overall here.. some ok punches, ..Sphere & B.I nice tryed , some good lines aswell, .. but u have been edged. Vote - Aisle & Emerge. |
B.I and sphere did ok...some lines were nice...some not so good
Aisle and emerge came a little more cositent and harder hitting Good match V/ Aisle and emerge |
BI n' Sphere... the rating on your verse would be technically 3... out of a possible 10... played lines... forced or yet worse crap wordplay... Flow in Sphere's was ok... Bi no... All in all just didn't really like it at all...
a HERBAL Divide..seperating Vanilla from Cube ..they wanted to be Underground.. ….so I made these Fools take the Tube ^was fucking stupid... there were no highlights... Aisln' n' Emergency... What... another alias? Might I add a nice n witty check in Damn Brix... I've seen better structure..... following 9/11! nice... could definetly have been worded better... was alot hotter when I did it... but good none the less... A wack M-M verse it's a fact...his aplication's will soon retrack They tried to spit some hot shit at the thread.... .......................................but the thread spit it back ^ good shit here...yet again could be worded better... but I suggest you find another structure n' flow for your verses... cause this one is honestly pretty garb... sorry broski... vote Aisle n' Emergency... Aisle won it... |
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