Quick Verse
 

Its been running in my head. And most likely will be used for a song

Being Mean is meaningless
Specialy when Karma is schemin
Make you relive a scene as a victim
When you lived as the one who struck em
Fuck em'
if they struggelin and not wantin to lend a hand
Do you understand the hypocritcy of a man
Watch individual strands string into rope
To make you choke, for you philosphical quotes
freedom of speech is non-existent
Cuz you pay price if they listen
Commision for you lenchen when your convicted
For turning truth into truth in the booth
Watch them turn false into truth with a golden tooth
Ya pockets loose while theirs tight
short understanding but they live high
While you overseas the seas but ya mouth is dry
Try thirstin for a new birth on this earth
while you hunger for the first
Every verse is worst that you disperse
Except to the unknown listener
That feels your hurt


Just a quick keystyle might turn it into a verse on a 1 verse track. But jut jottin down. No struture. Juggelin concepts. Tell me wat ya think.


Im gonna go feed some tracks and drop da links Holla

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3209754

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246036

I dont know how i really feel about this piece. in fact, i was so uncertain that i went and checked some of ya open mics in ya sig. by the way big ups on them. its obvious you have talent, but i took this as a bunch of random thoughts, which is explainable byt the fact that its a keystyle. the emotion in it was on track and it got your point across, i just feel you may have needed better word selection. an overall good drop
6.5/10

If you drop it on here as an audio, pm me the link and ill leave feed. just might need to hear it in the authors voice

Kinda hard to follow most of ya lines, but in over all respect to your past piece i can tell this wasn't really what was expected but then again its only a quick keystyle sorry for an inadequate feed but i feed according to effort.

i think it would have rhymed better if you said
Being Mean is meaningless
Specialy when Karmas in the scheme of it......
i could tell you wrote it pretty quick,im sure when you sit down and write it youll use a bigger vocabulary overall, 5/10...you did write it fast..