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Artistica~Mente vs Elementality
RULES LINK READ OR BE DQED FOR BEING NEWBISH
TOPIC=LAYERS OF THE SOUL |
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Meh.........Checking in...................................
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Layers of the soul Semi-Automatic shells that seek ignorance They make their obituaries with their pride One part of you fake/ the other is despised You take the life out of every numb infant The more you silence you the more you fade Drag your soul fighting to escape the arrogance A part of you says love yourself no matter what The other says forget materials, forget matter Forget everything but what it is that matters most The frequency from you to you is jet lagged Crippled souls aimlessly wander this null universe Tantalized by the glittering prizes they're trapped Like miles of an oasis transformed instantly to mirage This box is filled to the brim with bait and tackle Never find the right hook in life to catch truth All of this existence inhaling in its own defined prefix This breathe collapsed many times before, and will again Life only asks you so many times to take off your coat Stay awhile, have some meaning, and take this truth... Subverted souls peel away their layers to reach the core Simultaneously orchastrated introsepctive movement begins. |
Introduction-
Staring at the top of the sky, where my destination will be in a few seconds But first i want to expose my feelings of why I'm doing this, this suicide It begins with love, the day my heart was broken, my whole life changed And adding to this, depression, of all things i was feeling so down not being encourage, by other people, it was the opposite. O the insults And finally "Laughters"...I couldnt take it any more...the pointry fingers Teeth's showing with thier open jaws, I felt like they was going to eat me. And as i go and try to make my destination come true, i lounge forward Let it begin, the stories behind this suicide. see all of you one day...bye 1st layer I saw you kissing him and my whole world crash up-side down The lust was beyond my level, I can't believe what my eyes are seeing I know the saying "Love hurts" But this love cutted through me like a butter knife The punture, of my wounds are so deep, it can't be healed by using a band-aid I watch in disgrace like "gay porn", my dry pupil quickly turn to tears all watery Theres 2 side of me.......1 Act of revenge, and 2 in god way...walk and leave With shaken lips, and being choked by the tears caught up in my throat Ran down the road, my tears leaving invisible traces, with a rose flower in my hand 2nd layer The days i didnt have no friends, sitting by the window watching the day go by Like a rose getting darker, my life was the same, it was all source of depression I didnt have the energry to live through this horrific world, it was all soo hard My heart was getting broken into piecies. Judging myself, lead me to end this I depend on everyone opinions, but not depond on myself, I'm a dumb person See! Again with the "judging" myself, that's why i have to end this life, i wont go far The future of good and with the source of the light, is something i'm unable to reach Now the 2nd layer of my soul is peeled, it's time to expose the layer behind the mask Behind the scars, of the days i use to cutt myself in the bathroom to find myself 3rd layer Falling and falling, with my eyes close, i see images of my 3rd layer of my soul It's being ripped open and expose like an oinion peel, it was the "Laughters" The pointy fingers, while my tears leak with sadness, as my life fill with acid Open jaw's and smiling face fill with insults, "Your not normal" from thier vocals My head jerks, everything stops all of a sudden, the light has gotten darker Those all of my layers of my soul, in this world, that's why i commited suicide The depression i couldnt take, the heart broke i couldnt glue back to shape Now the laughters, The insults, that i couldnt out-break...leads to my deadly fate Those are the 3 layers of my soul as I lay hopeless on the concrete My life is washed by hates, surround by depression, i couldnt take it no more Tightly bound in the barrier of the abyss, i was dropped on earth in a pit The pit of darkness, the pit where there's was no escape, like being locked in a cage Cage, I'm locked with hate, and echo's of laughters, ring's in my ear There's a path, but it's not visionable, The future of me is not looking good. With every bone in my body broken, and my jaw is open with leaks of blood I'm happy even though I'm dead, the blood is leaking out the depression of me Meh Quick key.............2 minutes left, i couldnt believe myself that i wrote this much. BLAH I MIGHT GET DQ...............................BLAH! |
EMOTION AND IMAGERY:tweety
VOCAB: elementality FLOW, METAS...ETC:tweety. vote is tweety. simply becuase the emotion was really tense. showed alot of feelings. |
^^ That might be DQ cause it wasn't explain very good.......Meh I dont know Cali It'll handle it...........BLAH!
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both did a good job in creaitivity i will have to give it to tweety cuz she had different layers and showed that the topic could go on and on so thats a plus for tweety. In vocabulary both had good vocab used and they showed both a lot of emotion in their piece. but both did a wonderful job showin their emotions on the topic but im gon give the vote to tweety for bein more creative in her piece both did good but
v/ tweety for bein more creative |
well tweety i aint gonna vote cuz your herby oppenant might say its hate vote but the vote is good cuz basically all elementality had was big words and you owned him in all other aspects
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