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.existance. 10-10-03 10:10 PM

I See You Girl . . .
 
I See You Girl, Even Though You Low Key . . .
I'm Lonely, And Want You As My One And Only . . .
You Mean So Much, But Say So Little . . .
A Rock And A Hard Place, With Me In The Middle . . .
You Remain A Riddle, So Answer The Mystery . . .
All Them Other Niggas, Leave Them As History . . .
Im Drowning In Misery, So Give Me This Present . . .
Your Hand, In Mine, Now Isnt This Pleasant ? ?
I Cant Figure Out Your Brain Though, It Remains So . . .
This Pain Yo, Is Driving Me Insane Slow . . .
This Chance Wont Pass Me, I Wont Miss It . . .
Because I Instantly Light Up When You Visit . . .
So Please Just Come And Let Me Hold You Tight . . .
Because Ma, Its Gon Be Awfully Cold Tonight . . .

:: too easy :: 10-10-03 11:41 PM

im lovin that verse man, thats amazing...plus i can relate to it also...very nice good flow and multis all over the place...

awesome verse keep doing your thing

.existance. 10-11-03 12:07 AM

Thanx For The Reply, Uppin For Some More Tonight . . .

Smooth JT 10-11-03 12:21 AM

Good shit here. Very good flow, awsome word placement. I felt it to. you have a talent so plant it and let it grow. spect JT

MoparMaddness 10-11-03 12:25 AM

Nice drop existance. This will be one to remember for a while to come. Keep the pieces comin. Look forward to reading more from you.

MM

HOT ICE 10-11-03 01:15 AM

Very grabbing. I understand totally.
Nice work!!!!!!!

.existance. 10-11-03 09:48 AM

Thanx For The Replies, Uppin For More

rule 10-11-03 07:44 PM

good verse, nice wordplay it was a basic read but flowed smoothly an thats wut really caught my eye you stood out in this even though it was pretty simple...8 /10...good spit...peep myn...Faith..peace

GeT CrUnK 451 10-11-03 11:21 PM

Good stuff man i feel like that some times and can relate to that i new at poetry im a rapper and startin to like poetry more but i really am lookin forward to hearin some more of your studd man good verse and goot multis

.existance. 10-12-03 11:25 AM

Writing Poetry Makes Writing Tracks Easier . . . At Least For Me . . .
Thanks For The Replies, Uppin For More . . .

HazY.B 10-13-03 01:24 PM

short
yet
great

i loved the easy read this poem gave off
it was simple from line
one to the end

but yet it held
such a powerful impact

was really wonderful to read
such a great peice\

i loved this line:

This Pain Yo, Is Driving Me Insane Slow

altho youe rpeice was more on an open mic tip ( i felt
it was still a grace to the poetry room

FanTa ZeE 10-13-03 01:28 PM

a lovely heartfelt poem. morw lads should write letters like that to girls they love, the world would be a better place, if its from the heart, then i sincerly hope you get your girl...peace and love to you, this was a good, simple drop but i felt it.

varentao 10-14-03 08:20 PM

What a nice read. Very very nice read. It was easy to follow and just oozed with a chilled yet emotionally carseesing atmosphere.

Simple. Well compressed into not too many words. That's a difficult thing to do.

...resp...

Split-eyez 10-15-03 03:27 PM

nice piece dawg... flowed perfectly plus you used the right vocab, short but tight.
Keep droppin, I was feelin this to the fullest

peace

.existance. 10-17-03 01:49 PM

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