RapVerse.com Community

RapVerse.com Community (http://community.rapverse.com/index.php)
-   Textual Releases (http://community.rapverse.com/forumdisplay.php?f=5)
-   -   Corrupted Visionz:Reppin' (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=107946)

SyaNidal 01-18-04 06:24 PM

Corrupted Visionz:Reppin'
 
reppin to the fullest a sight with three eyes,
illest crew on Rb come at you n you hide,
battle n be surprised, spittin lightnin to lite up skyz,
cauzin brains to fry, commin at you in disguise,
aliases of people but no one on rb even knows,
cauz we ill flows, wit punchelines we throw,
commin hard n fast while ya spittin ya verse slow,
as if we wus ridin speed boats while you attempt to row,
leave ya lost wit a short arm like ya name wus nemo, (finding nemo)
makin ya lean yo, bury you in our lyrics call us deep snow,
think we about to step down n we come back.. us leave NO,
call me syanidal cauz i poison emcees yo, wit my green glow,
CredZ leader of the crew wit co leadin Uski the ledgend,
leave you like a pair of shoes cauz when we done u start steppin,
and if landmines come at you ya might wanna step where ya watch,
i mean watch ya step, cauz we all come ill n hard like 9mm glocks,
throwin punchlines like muhammed ali, zip through n sting like bee,
KO you Easy, like my last name wus E, wit 3 eyes what can you see?,*
leave you bruised and in a casket, put your ashes in easter baskets,**
call you serena williams cauz your kinda feminem jackin tennis rackets,
Origin ILL mindz and verse from our heads... we commin wit ill takticz...
you blow hard callin you brianna banks... cauz you suck n thats what a fact is,
its crunch time, commin wit ill punchlines, givin football players the punt signs,
deliver then dump rhymes, commitin sick ill and invisioned blunt crimes...,
teachin ya how to stunt like my name wus Unity, to win against us u need forutanity,
i come to ya house and aresst yo for not attenden to be skooled like my name is truancy,
i have ill tendan... ceez, and kids look up to me, becauz i put influences on fluancy...
done wit this topic never to regret, throwin up inters in the first ot like my name is bret,
we arent blind even without 2 eyes we legacyz that no one on earth can ever ferget,
ill tell u to fuck off but i dont got time to waste, make haste, leave you wit vinegar tatses,
seein you eatin paste, cauz you jsut copyed my lines thats illegal in some states,
hittin the brakes, i need to stop n break, cauz your already merked n your verse is late,
Corrupted visions make you blind with sight you cant attempt to see...
wit illegal flows u cannot beat, cauz this is to ill for you but it aint for me...
giving sight a third eye makin you flee... like wannabe rappers n fake emcees,
I guess your alias is pine cone hes a wannabe, just like his name we dangle you form trees...
Bitch please... my ill tendancyz.. rip emcees... call me a syanidal disease...
your startin to scratch guess you got fleaz.... let you dangle form that tree..
this has made us happy... cauz we chillin n watch u chime in the breeze...

Corrupting Your Visionz... Ill Rip you a New Socket...

SyaNidal 01-19-04 02:01 AM

uppin... wtf come one 17 views and no fuckin replies?
give me feedback drop a link ill give u some...

SyaNidal 01-19-04 11:43 AM

Fucking Uppin!!

Penskills 01-19-04 01:35 PM

..Very nice..good flow and wordplay..also a good content to go along with it..keep up the good work..holla back~~

~Click on Free stuff~

Gene Pool 01-19-04 03:13 PM

yo man some really good wordplay in this, I found the flow was a bit hard to follow in a couple spots though but u had some good vocab and multi's which made up for it, your sturcture was kinda mixed up a little it seems but that might differ from reader but to me it looks like it could use a little work but keep up bro. peace.

if u got time peep my collab with Yaz called "Stories of Old" and leave some feedback. muchly appreciated thanx in advance. peace.

SyaNidal 01-19-04 07:53 PM

upp upp and away call me...
no not really fuck that sentance.../\
lets get some feedback leave a link...
Pz...
_-SyaNidal-_

-uski- 01-19-04 09:02 PM

i liked this u mentioned my name i like that alot....1000/5 enough Said...Any way Ya Strucutre was Alright but i think ya need work....ya flow was really good betta than i expected it to be...soo all and all man this was good and i Like The Way U used My Name i that Line Really Kool...Keep It Droping man...PeacE...

RythmicTendicies 01-20-04 10:48 AM

try to keep your bars the same length, cos the flow was affected here, however you had internals which sorta made up for it to a certain degree.....

Some decent wordplay here, nice Nemo line, and i felt the vocab was pretty good as well, just try to make your rhymes more complex, and shorten your bars mos def...but keep at it, you got potential - use it wisely!

Dev 01-20-04 01:14 PM

pretty decent effort... most was worded nicely, and so flowed ok... but in places it fell, even the syllable count out... but likes been said some decent wordplay n shit... ya scheme was ok, but seemed a bit repetative... try'n flip it round n shit.... but yeah not a bad drop.... maybe it could have been split, with a hook or sumthin, so its easiier on the eye....

SyaNidal 01-20-04 10:09 PM

aght thanks for da feedback lets try n get some more...
leave a link to your open mics ill come hit it up...

SyaNidal 01-21-04 03:33 PM

cmon hit this shit up ill leave yall some feedback
if you leave me alink cmon people.... need some replies...

SyaNidal 02-06-04 10:30 PM

up up and away/\


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 02:41 AM.