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Brydon 09-15-07 09:55 AM

end of the depression period
 
life is really hard!
it's people like me who aint prepaired and ends up being scared.
not enough help,
so much pain,im starting to feel insane!
always down,i hate this town,
thats why my face dont change from a frown.
this room feels like a cell,
im really not well,i dont mean to dwell,
its jus sumthing i had to tell.
my life is a mess,i need to lay a new nest,
i cant handle the stress,that i can confess.
i must change the way i think,
my thoughts are enough to make many hearts sink.
im glad me and boo no longer fight,
hope its not long before i keep her warm at night.

David Lama 09-15-07 02:44 PM

had some aight lines and thoughts overall but it was a bit too simple and the mechanics could have been alot more polished. seemed like a keyed verse or something. keep posting though

10-11-07 12:51 PM

You have 3 Days To Post 1 Or More Links In Order To Keep This Open Mic Open, According To New Rules. Do So Or This Will Be Closed & Moved.

10-14-07 06:18 AM

Closed, Moved And Stored.


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