C.A.L.I vs KING~DIPSET
 

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TOPIC: It's Raining Fire

Check Check Check Good Luch Homie;)

Checkity Check Check ..............................

Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains
Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane
A lone scream awakes my dreams into a cold sweat
I smell the exhaust and hear the screach of a lone jet
I stand yet fall as the ground crumbles beneath me
I awake to a soldier pulling away rubble trying to reach me
As my vision wavers i see more fire fall and rain on the land
Like shattered glass the soldier explodes as he stands
With no hand to help i pull myself from the wreckage
An explosion knocks me off balance as i fall i reach for his weapon
Land flys in all directions like fireworks in a clear night sky
And the screams are of misery of those not willing to die
Offspring passes in the arms of his mother unable to smile
And close by a mother dies in the arms of her child
Then it stops and only the shouts of those passing are heard
As the buildings like old candles continue to burn
Then another screach and the air is thick with the evil
And more fire falls and continues to rain on my people
Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained
As we all die and the fire continues to rain.........................

yea cli erasied my other post if it makes him happy :D but here is my vote god,
I felt king more on this one he had better emotion his flow sounded good to me and his poem just sounded better no hate CALI. overall KING gets my vote peace.

pretty good battle here cali took this though um i think by the verses hes more comfortable doin poetry seems to come easy but yea calis verse got me into the story showed emotion an overall it told a story an thats what its all about king dipset you did alright to but i think cali got it...vote-CALI

This was a close battle, loved the topic actually.

Cali: your vivid way of describing situations is amazing, I felt as if I was in the middle of it all withnessing what was happening. The emotion was strong to, you made us really feel the chaos,the pain, the struggle...

Land flys in all directions like fireworks in a clear night sky
And the screams are of misery of those not willing to die
^especially the last line is very nice, just got me thinking about this for a sec...

Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained
As we all die and the fire continues to rain.........................
^your ending was nice to, it was as if you wrote an unfinished poem but I love it because it makes us think what might happen next and such, love that approach


King~~Dipset: the emotion was raw in your poem from first line to the last, stayed consistent on that. Had some good imagery but I feel you could've described certain things in a better way. When I look at your vocab, I can see that you found good balance between complex and basic. Good job!

Then I noticed This Was not A Suicidal Thought
This was A Stride for the Prize, A press towards the mark
A press For freedom Of my soul From this place of walls
A Place Of supposed Liberty and Justice For all
But I never Seen The Liberty and justice Stood absent
^Those lines right here were amazing, loved reading them, had strong message to them...


Very close battle but my vote goes to Cali because I was feeling his a little bit more, no hate though...Good job from both of you!

Both drops had excellent emotion...I thought Cali took the slight advantage in imagry....but Cali takes this for better story and creativity...King used the same concept as Cali which brought his verse down in my eyes

Vote=Cali

wowo People actually Think I did Good LOL well cali remember when I first enetered the legue I couldnt write a good poem if my life depended On it LOL well Im elevating rapidly because my last 3 Battles ive won Has been topicals and I Got One topical In My sig now if yall wanna check that out but um....

Thanx for the voting It will be returned
YES YOU DID GOOD I TOLD YOU YOU WERE GOOD NOW DONT FREEPOST AGAIN THIS IS THE SECOND TIME TIME IVE WARNED YOU-C.A.L.I

First my Fav Lines

Cali:

Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains
Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane

King Dipset:
But I never Seen The Liberty and justice Stood absent
when I needed it most it Just Turned away with Passion

Cali had better imagery which made the poem come alive, king dipset yours was like looking through a window, but emotion was better than CALIs. But overall Cali had the most enjoyable poem so :

\\//ote = CALI

very nice battle

favorite lines from cali

Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains
Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane

Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained
As we all die and the fire continues to rain

favorite lines from dipset

I took that As a Stumbling block that was Blocking my path
I Look out to see the Fire Covering bodies as if they were taking a bath

As i Stood i saw The Shackles Being loosed, And the chains undone
And My angel Came from The sky And Said Your work here is done

vote cali

but this was a really close battle

just a formality now......................Dipset

a Yall I Hope yall Know that this is my New Name ......So When you set up My battles and stuff make sure it be in this name and not King~~Dipset

Thanx

cali wins closed