"Gotta Survive" By Bonafide
Elevate my voice till its louder than thundering in air
never hesitate with choices i wonder if any care i sundered in the stares like a kid's kaleidoscope ive survived by gloat but i'll die when i collide with hope hopefully i'll continue to float with no fear in my look keep making good stories it sounds...................... ................like i stole Shakepeare's one rhyme book my tears leave time shook im so tense im a sprinter too dense for ya'll im sticking to this like splinters man its rough and cold and a must to stay tough and bold was cuffed and told that i'll never do so now i buff and mold training my mind straining my time to increase my words pain is my sign etched in brain and it never ceased to be heard birds are free with peace i'll be like them one day to see at least something of importance is pure gold to me like treasure if any measure hits i'll cheish it never to be sold for free im gonna be going fast as i can like cars doing a buck fourty my dark story wont be gory man i know this is for me With a strong burst im gonna be quick to bomb first taking out competition no need for petitions i got a long herse above the worst loving to curse heres another nightmare when my sights paired straight they tremble cause my fights scare they not prepared for me and my exceptional abilities no one cared so i'll probably end up in correctional facilities protect your own utility thats gonna change my life you'll see me round nothing gonna bring me down in deranged strife the lane changes everyday so i'll take it one day at a time make it quick to be done you do whats yours and i'll do whats mine my crimes evolved becoming more elaborate but never completed it doenst bother me im gonna go at it properly and defeat it up and over the shit nothing will be able to stop me no cable will lock me you cant knock my hustle theres no copy just try to rock me im heavily ready with a spark to vibe its rough staying alive going through life dark but i gotta survive Feeling like i got "Po Nigga Blues" confused like i cant figure clues no soothing for me cause life's giving me a bigger bruise i try to cruis but questions in my mind are saying if i die tonight what would i do cause theres no gliding right or riding light just hold tight for this rough ride around the corners theres light for souls if i dont find it i cant stress my mind cause thats the best of time gotta go forward dont wanna be in back like the rest in line gaining confidence along the way each day gives me spirit when i spit you hear it ya'll behind me like i stared thru my rearview u think i care well i dont need to i just gotta do what i do fools trying to block and lock while im 'cool' staying 'hot' i cant stop cause the worl around me is getting colder now i have to get bolder like atlas................................ .........................................i got the world on my shoulders im a soldier maybe i'll stay heartless to get through darkness at the end i'll try and spark this to be so live ive cried felt like ive died but thats life and i gotta survive The structure's messed up, i kno. I just found this in one of my rhyme books and decided to post it. |
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hey that was dope dawg keep it up elevating a must and you i don't think can elevate much more than you already have 9/10 keep it up 1 love
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thanks........uppin
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nice shit homie, good vocab, nicely structured and a good flow. the multies really helped out the flow as well homie, nice drop
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nice drop, i see you focus for this one, alot of good flow, a couple of nice bars couple of multis that made this a hella read im likeing this alot holla
RTF i got 3 drops tat need feed back |
Yea i try and focus, thanks man uppin for more feed
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uppin for more feed, i'll rtf
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Hey JuSt Dropping Feed:
Overall, i really enjoyed ya piece, especially if i can sit and rap it, and get the vibe i know its hot....Ya Structure was banging, and i can tell u put a lot of heart and depth into this piece....my favorite line was: "up and over the shit nothing will be able to stop me no cable will lock me you cant knock my hustle theres no copy" i never heard no shyt like that, very nICE..ha.. Ya last verse, it seem as if u was just hurry up to finish it or something, like you aint put into it as much as ya first too...but it was steal decent... Keep Droppin and u will soon see a fan in me...YUP! |
Thanks for the feed uppin for more.
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truely enjoyed this shit. u was like 100% focused on this and didnt leave it till it was done.
flow was good. had lots of multies and mixed very well. and had a constante sturcture. so im given this a 9.5 out of 10 (minus 0.5 cus it was long and i was lazy so i took me 4 eva 2 read.) keep it up kidd. |
Overall an okay piece. I get the message and the overall vibe of it which is a good thing. I think the rhyme was pretty good and flowed well throughout. Structure isnt as bad as you think it is. ONE MAJOR GRIPE, very played topic, Iunno so many people talk about surviving and just dealing with the hand your dealt.
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Thanks for the feed man
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everything was on point in this. I was really feeling it. I enjoyed the concept as well. Keep up the good work kid. 8.5/10. Dope shit
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