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Kein Witz Vs. Hells Fire
Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday
No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your poetry battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues! Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count! Topic: Dressing the Earth in Flames |
I'm here. Good luck.
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'kay. I worked on this a little bit. Don't ho-show or anything...make this good.
Blanket of Fire Betwixt anomalies, abominations of the watchful eyes of astronomy, All for fool's gold, to reclaim the souls sold, to end all evil economies. The planet's gravity grabbing missiles into its surface, leaving large cavities. Mothers holding babies, praying for maybes, to stop this cruel, horrible tragedy. Watching the ending world, the orange clouds of flame the skies so angrily hurled. The apocalypse near, feeding off fears, taking no heed of the citizens fetally curled. Gloved fingers smashing buttons, maelstroms ending all the world's gluttons. His eyes glazed, oblivious to the event taking place, down the street, strutting. People praying as he played God to cover the lands in flame, making it aesthetic. Not harkening to the shouts, screaming for a devout to save all them, so pathetic. The person to end it, bending wits, survival only for the people who are the most fit. The demon coming to claim pain on this momentous day... showing his evil tricks. |
checkin in.................................
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Dress of fire
Stared out in a flamed out way, from galaxy, planetary, milky way cooled out to crust on earth braid, from ivory, geography, blue swade silk on fire from satan's gate, so wavy, red ruby left it to burn away without visible arms the straps ignighted the oceans with exstasay clouds of smoke with pores of tanned skies after a rainy shave chaos so beautiful people died meltin expression nothin to say shaking and tremblin as shiva made destruction more than shade making and ramblin as jupita made seduction to earths firy face living for dieing happiness when crying sending heavenly binding to hear demonic grinding and the rape of innocence eye scream the dress waved rippling to scar the eye of the fire that night pyro to arsonist threading needle with mighty hell forge might oxygen gave and took life like a nicatine marboro red light she layed there decomposing life and birthing phoenix night |
MY VOTE = HELLS FIRE
I loved Kein witz's drop the multis's with such high level of vocab was sick man, only problem is that i felt your drop was more topically orientated and it felt a lil bit storytelling...You didnt realy express much emotion or describe fire in your contxt of approach...Helles Fire dropped a below par peice by his standards but it was technically solid..He got the job done :thumbup: |
I enjoyed reading both pieces and will break both of them down...
Kein Witz: excellent drop here, unlike Acuity said above me I do feel the fire in your piece due to very good imagery. The emotion was there as well but I feel you wrote a more imagery orientated poem. Vocab was on point as well as the sound expression in your drop, a lot of alliterations and assonances which gave the drop a good pace. Hells Fire: very nice poem as well, I feel you didn't so much focus on alliterations and assonances but you definitely had the sound expressions due to similar sounds. Like with Kein Witz, I think you wanted to make this more of an imagery piece than an emotional even though the emotion was there. The imagery was stronger of course compared to the emotion, vocab was at a high level. Close battle to judge in fact but in the end, my vote goes to Kein Witz. No hate to Hells Fire because you had an excellent drop as well, I am just feeling Kein Witz a little bit more but it was very, very close. Nice battle from both of you!!! |
anyways i just wrote a fucking book on this shit and my dumb ass girl fucking logged on and cut me off wtf.anyways ill be real brief now cuz i aint writing no book again both dropped good flow vocab and imagery was all equal yet kein seemed to bring a better emotional aspect to his drop which i fell gave him the upperhand.hellfire seemd to be unable to find a common ground where he could blend his imagery woth emotion he gave a good picture yet failed to bring the emotional aspect out making his poetic drop look more like a topical here.
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kein wins.............................................
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