RapidFire vs. Machavelli
 

10 lines..
no d/r or hate votes...
no verse feeding or playing...
I'll spit tonight, u drop urs by tomorow at midnight..got any problems with the deadline, then u need to tell me before the deadline n we can work somethin out...

peace

look....

you an herb, rappin with no wisdom or fame...
could this fag have a more unoriginal name???...
you know u gonna lose, I see the concern in ya face...
stole ya fuckin name..make tupac turn in his grave!...
I chew u like tobacco, n I 'spit' like a redneck...
u gettin fucked so hard...suprised ya not pregnant...
my profound verbal sounds will pound ya ear...
you so gay, u got stretchmarks around ya rear!
I'ma pierce ya torso, right through ya back and chest...
fuckin biter..I'ma expose you like Janet Jacksons breast!


iight..I'm done...

peace

uppin so this guy can post his verse...u have til midnight tonight so dont' fuck me over...if u need extra time just post in here and let me know and I'll be cool w/ it...but I'd rather u hurry up n do ur shit

peace

I can go by his name cause that's all that i'm worth/
i know your screamin PLEASE!! cause i that it hurt/
you little busters talk lotta shit but can't seem through with it/
i have your fate in my hands what am i gon' do with it//
alot of you people now think you can make your rhymes rock/
bot endin' up messin' up your words then they just stop/
you ain't gonna expose me any way shape or form/
i got you trapped in the endless mother fuckin storm!!//
and i can't stop i refuse to lose/
before you start to win you gonna lose all your screws/
and i'm showin you all the facts/
and make sure you come out intact!!//

think that both machevilli and rapid were good there were some good bunch lines from both but the only rhing I got to say for m is watch your spelling because you mest up in one of the lines because when you spit those 10 lines go back and see if you mad a mistake our stumbled on some words that's all and rapid good spitin I liked the way you did that battle
vote:rapidfrid

Machavelli takes dis.~RaPiDfIrE~ week verse and week puches.Machavelli verse was good for a newb,good punches and flow.keep it up both of u.
v/Machavelli(simply beta alround)!!

let's get some real votes yo....

none of this one line no poll vote shit...

peace

no verse feeding or playing...

^ just realized that he broke that rule..

but since I'm a nice (confident) dude, I'ma let that slide....

uppin this shit...peace

Full BreakDown

Rapid Fires Verse

you an herb, rappin with no wisdom or fame...
could this fag have a more unoriginal name???...
(Nice personal off the bat to heat things up , but basic rythming ) 7.5/10

you know u gonna lose, I see the concern in ya face...
stole ya fuckin name..make tupac turn in his grave!...
( Decent flow , basic rythmes , not a great followup to opener ) 6/10

I chew u like tobacco, n I 'spit' like a redneck...
u gettin fucked so hard...suprised ya not pregnant...
( I heard many variations of the 2nd line , overplayed , however never heard the first
Kinda of funny 7/10 )
my profound verbal sounds will pound ya ear...
you so gay, u got stretchmarks around ya rear!
( simple but effective , I laughed out loud reading it 7.5/10)

I'ma pierce ya torso, right through ya back and chest...
fuckin biter..I'ma expose you like Janet Jacksons breast!
( In another week the JJ line is gonna so overplayed , buts still semi-fresh I guess
Nothing special but an alright closer 7/10 )
Total 35/50 ............70%

Machavelli's verse


I can go by his name cause that's all that i'm worth/
i know your screamin PLEASE!! cause i that it hurt/
(Weak opener , no props at all on this 4/10)

you little busters talk lotta shit but can't seem through with it/
i have your fate in my hands what am i gon' do with it//
( It/It , yo man , theres like a million rythmes for it , try to find one, lack of flow too
5/10)
alot of you people now think you can make your rhymes rock/
bot endin' up messin' up your words then they just stop/
( A little better than the 1st 2 but still needs heavy elevation try some more advanced rythming , your stuff is real basic 6/10)

you ain't gonna expose me any way shape or form/
i got you trapped in the endless mother fuckin storm!!//
( Maybe it wasnt on purpose , but your feeding off his verse a little using expose , but no biggie IMO 5.5/10 )

and i can't stop i refuse to lose/
before you start to win you gonna lose all your screws/
(LOL , aiight , this is a good example of remedial rapping , but everyone has to start on the ground floor , unless of course your a born natural and those guys have contracts 5/10 )

and i'm showin you all the facts/
and make sure you come out intact!!//
( No hate bro , you just need to elevate , take a little time , think of some good rythmes and try to flow it together , and try to write longer lines 5/10)

30.5/60 .........................50.8%

Aiight , the breakdown is complete

Rapid Fire Wins
RF - your lucky that MAch didnt come to hard , cause you did enough to win , but nothing really stuck out from your verse )

Mach - Yo Man , don't give up .... just try and put your shit together a little tighter , and don't give up .....

Peace Out
CrazyE

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112213

^ I know I did enough to win..I like to scout my opponents before I spit....I don't like trying too hard if I can get away with being lazy...

lmao yea the Janet line is gonna be played...but I used it the very next night, so I might be the official first person to have ever used it...but who knows...

peace

we need votes!!!!

v/ rapidfire.

Why? Not only did his opponent feed off of his verse, Rapid also had better punchlines. They were more effective...even tho the Janet Jackson one is played to death. Machavelli...your verse was ok but it just ain't workin...you needa add sum creativity in der so ur punches can make us go "dammm".

"you ain't gonna expose me any way shape or form/
i got you trapped in the endless mother fuckin storm!!//"

You can make it more creative, like...

"There ain't no way you can expose me in any way, shape, or form
cuz you can't eye what i'm doin...your in the middle of this storm!"

^Like a hurricane...eye of the hurricane...it ain't the best example but u get what I'm trying 2 say right...make ya punchlines more creative.



Both return the favour and drop an honest vote on one of my battles please. Thank you.

^ werd...Janet line wasn't played when I used it goddammit!!! lol jk

I'll vote on another one of ur battles after u poll vote on this one...

peace

yo..u sleepin mutha fuckas....vote! I can't up this anymore...

Punches: Rapid, had a decent punch, the Janet Jackson line was alright, but that was the only worthy punch in both verses.
Wordplay: Neither, neither had any wordplay
Multis: Neither, both used 1 syllable
Personals: Rapid, had some lines about Tupac
Opener: Tie, both openers were pretty weak
Closer: Rapid, had the Janet Jackson line

Vote - RapidFire

Both could use some elevation, Machevelli, you fed off his entire verse trying to defend yourself. You can be banned for that, besides the fact that you did it in such a whack way. All you did was say, no I didn't to all of Rapid's lines. Be creative, come up with your own punches. Throw more punches into your verse RapidFire, but you got the idea.

fuckin biter..I'ma expose you like Janet Jacksons breast!
Rapid's best line

Return the favor in my battle with Rule

^ thanx for the vote..but I didn't use one syllable rhymes..I didn't use multis, but all of my rhymes had 3 syllables I think....if u heard it on audio or something u'd catch it easier tho....

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