[ $ ] v/s crunch
 

10-12lines...
no hate crew d/r etc...
battle now
40 mins drop
u first then
gud luk...

im the white kid in this game waitin 2 get out the yard
for now im on the grind reppin the streets hard
i post up wit the ak or da sawed of shotty
fuckin wit me is like tellin cops they gotta find ya body
i dun fuck around i keep all filled up clips
when i play wit da gat its all hollow tips
yea im the nigga that feared up on the block
ur the stupid nigga that stays ridin da cock
ill pull mah signature make u bite the curb
face it ur a faggot ur just anotha bitch i herb
thats it u faget ass bitch im down wit this clown
ur betta of not speakin not even a sound ~1~

crunch ur shit was tight nigger $ dotn got a chance

not mah best but good luc

u gunna drop sumtime soon

$ r u gunna spit somthign pussy or did crunch put u on the hush

yeh bin to tha store 4 tha liqa
checkin in..........................................

2 day would b strait

u cheked in ova a half hour ago us a bitch

Listen up crunch, cus im gona tell ya this once,
u done droped 7 lines an not even a punch,

U suck dick like the new a triple cyclone dyson,
from the start it was over, im lewis u mike tyson,

u shootin hollow tips, an landin hollow punches,
gessin lust is yo dick ryder, heard u travel in bunches,

Lets b honest u aint no thug, u just another blagga,
gets me laffin chatin gunz, a mans wepon is a dagga,

u lines dont even make sence an u calling me the herb,
Gobel di goop and a hoo haa, no sign of vocab or a verb,

at the end of this battle what do i leave u with? nuthin,
my [ $ ] still untouched thats what you get when your bluffin,


bitch

OI lust
if you aint mega man SHUSH!!

what you running ya mouth bout boi
this aint even your battle so if ya aint gonna vote get the fuck out

BITCH

yo personnally i thought that both verses were goog for newbs. but i have to say that $'s verse took this shit. it had a good flow and rhymed all the way through. also the punches thrown by $ were harder and more to the point. Crunch you had a good verse aswell though but you need to concentrate more on ya punches rather than chatin bout ya self. overall good verses both VOTE= [ $ ]

i agree, $ came with harder and more clear punches...structure was better a couple lines a didnt like but overall an ok peice.
crunch...you just sound like you're trying to rap about guns and fags...be a little more creative and more personal try to come harder with the punches

yo tnx for tha vote an comment,
uppin for honest votes.

Ya i agree ^^. $ came a lil harder an u could tell he really wasnt forcin his rhymes like crunch... Im still a newb, so i can relate to yall, but i think dat $ took dis one.

punches~~$
multis~~neither
flo~~$
Structure~~$ (his was much easier to read, all about clarity.)
Overall~~~~~~~ [ $ ] ~~~~~~

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