One Life To Live
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=5543354

check it out let me know what you think

it's going on my new cd "THE COME UP"



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Word.....I'm guessing you're using that AKG Perception 200 cause your voice sounds crisp as hell man. I like the whole feel of this track man. Flow and everything is perfect. Hook sounded like you slipped in the beginning but I think its just the change in the cadence from the verse to the hook that made me think that. Hook's nice though man. You got the beginnings of a really nice track here man. Good shit :thumbup:

And yes, we do need to be doing tracks together....lol

it actually sounds pretty good..

...at times it sounds like u have a lisp so its kinda hard to make clear of what youre saying..but the flow is cool..quality definitely sounds much better.

hook is cool..real simple. i like this




hit me up..maybe i can get on it...

lol ahha i didn't even read the feedback on this

thanks though I appreciate it

yo fam feelin' this track man.....ya lyrics on this is strate....crispy clean quality....keep droppen fam.....i really can't critique much...aiite man....

This shit really is fuckin hot! haha.

Beat is fuckin sick, quality is an A+, lyrics/flow are perfect for the beat; all in all, you killed this shit.

You should just get someone to hop on it because it's a little short.

EDIT:
My bad, didn't see that it was a preview.

good ole PT skills like a rollercoaster.....you on the come up then back down.....

example - the first verse flow/lyrics on point....like woah on point.....emotion delivery, kinda monotonous....n in the hook you start to pick it up....work on ya influctions in ya voice.....it will make your real lyrics seem real for your life.....thats the only advice i can give on this.....potential on this one....its on the way dont let it slip back down

check out the shit i did with tony self, help another brotha advance too

1st verse- i like the flow with the beat it rolss thru real smooth sounds like the high end on your vocals are set a lil high..

Hook- shit is catchy reminds me of some old nas typ shit..

umm well i was waitin for more but thits it lol.. should make it longer or throw me on that shit haha.. slappp
id give it a
9/10

UH OH I see the new mic is working out for ya man..Quality is perfection. I'm really feeling the vibe of this track..Lyrics were on some real shit and flow was smooth as ever. I like how you kept the hook pretty simple as well..Also your energy level throughout the song fit perfectly..I can't really find anything wrong with this track, I just wish that it was longer..REMIX?!?!?! haha get at me son

ya, diggin the hook, finish this boi up for sure

I wasn't really feeling the verse, but the hook and beat were good. Your vocals didn't seem engaging or something, I don't know -_-. It's not that they were bad, they were good, just not dope.

that song is so inspiring, it makes me wanna do something nice to see em smile. ur flow was straight too. it kinda sounded like a freestyle to me but it was crazy nice, hope u get signed...

Intro was nice. Couldnt have done better

Verse1: Feeling the verse. Good vocab and the voice was on point

Hook: Scared me abit when i heard the sudden boost in volume. all smoothed and mellowed out then bam. But the chorus was on point

Overall for what is there I give it about a 7.5
I hope to hear the completeed version.

Verse 1:
Flow is nice, I hear a lot of internal rhyme but the thing that you have to do is learn how to infect people with your voice. The first thing people hear when you start spittin is your voice and if you don't grab em with it then it makes them not want to listen.

Hook
I defintely like the hook it fits the mood of the track kinda somber but at the same time you hit it with more force than the verse.. the verse should have been spit just like that hook

7/10 good shit though

RTF