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ShottaBoy 'vs' Triple_N
Rules Good Luck Both due to late check in, Dopeman is on -1 votes. be happy with that, I could just DQ you |
check check..........Good luck to the opponent...lets make it interesting
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...915#post1645915 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1646188 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=153069 |
Yup, check, check, sorry bout not checkin last night, i was busy........
but i'm here nah... |
where do i drop my verse?!!
In here stoopid, this thread |
A quick key to make deadline
Like deflated parachutes leavin' ya on "ground" Imitatin' "russian rulet losers," only good for 1 round Like "white bigots" on da police force I "shot-a-boy" If ya vying for victory why can't I spot-a-ploy U lose more then "lifers" do of there lifetime U couldn't spue hot shit if ya deficated on a mine You must crossbreed ya verses, dogyear rhymes 7 to 1 winnin' ratio, only infants been "KOed" more times All ya dope is sticks an stems, drop dimebags of self lies U could put "mike hawk" on stilts an not "rank" high Explanation-Infants nap 3-6 times a day...so KOed is a meta...let me use in a sentence Wow, your baby been sleep a while, yea she "knocked out." |
Dogg I'm So Complex When I Step In The Ring They Renamed Me ''Mr.PERPLEX''...
Nobody Would Feel Your ''Scriptures'' Even If U Posted Them In ''Codex''.. U Wouldnt Even ''Cum'' With A ''Hot Spit'' If U Performed ''Oral Sex''.. You So Dumb You'd Miss The ''Point'' Of My Disses Even If They Were Marked With A 50 Foot ''X''... Your Records Got U In ''Dreamland'' Like Your Part Of The MATRIX.. This Kids Steppin To ''Sick'' Rhymes That'll Leave U Needin ''Pediatrics''... If My Verse Is ''Tighter'' Then I Hope Like Some U Dont Resort To ''Dick Ridin'' As Your TACTICS.. I'ma ''Disable'' Ya Flow n Have U Postin In The Thread Thats Strictly For ''Spastics'' This The ''Writers Block'' An Your Sentenced To ''Life With A Pen''.. After This Verse 'NOW NIGGUHS NOTHIN' Is Why They Call You 'Triple N!!' |
matrix in his avy, thats what the dream;land line is all about....
dont think i need'a explain anythin else.. but if ya dont understand either of the flows dont vote |
Vote- Triple N.
He had Alot more Wordplay. With... The most Important THING. FLOW Shottah... You had no flow at all. And It's not a verse if it doesn't have flow. It just turns into a paragraph of insults. Triple was alot more clever with his lines. Although punches go to Shottah, In reality...they didn't exist because the flow wasn't there. |
triple had better punches, and shotta your flow, where was it, all over the place. Triple take this battle easy with better punches and better flow.
vote triple n |
This battle was good, but on Triple N's side, sorry Shotta, but that verse was pretty weak, you need a lot of work on your structure, try wrting your rhymes, like you write Normal ttext, it looks a lot better, trust me, just try it.
Triple, nice flow good punches, dope. V/ Triple N |
triple N won...
although it wasn't a great verse from triple he still took this by far, had gud flow and wordplay n some witty punches, shotta ya flow was off and i hate ur structure, u had some pretty average punches so this was always goin to triple... peace |
Vote: Triple.
Triple Got This. He Had A Neat Structured Verse Which Flowed Nicely. Shotta Ya Structure Let Ya Down Bad On This Shit. Triple Ya Had Some Real Nice Wordplay. Shotta Ya Punches were Decent But Structure Let Ya Down. |
nice battle but...
triple N got this... better punches more creative lines that hit direct and hard had me laughing at times vocab was decent and all around drop hard from jump till finish... shottaboy came preety hard as-well some good punches but need it to come more original and they would of hit harder and he probley would of got my vote but u aint lack in that catagory u just wasnt up to par flow decent creativeness was average but still i was feeling u'r verse nice drop fella's..... vote triple N |
Like deflated parachutes leavin' ya on "ground"
Imitatin' "russian rulet losers," only good for 1 round ^ Russian Roulet line a little played, weak meta Like "white bigots" on da police force I "shot-a-boy" If ya vying for victory why can't I spot-a-ploy ^ Haha, nice name play here U lose more then "lifers" do of there lifetime U couldn't spue hot shit if ya deficated on a mine ^ Kinda weak nice vocab though You must crossbreed ya verses, dogyear rhymes 7 to 1 winnin' ratio, only infants been "KOed" more times ^ Dog years thing is nice, I liked this bar All ya dope is sticks an stems, drop dimebags of self lies U could put "mike hawk" on stilts an not "rank" high ^ Nice closer, good personal. Overall 7/10 Dogg I'm So Complex When I Step In The Ring They Renamed Me ''Mr.PERPLEX''... Nobody Would Feel Your ''Scriptures'' Even If U Posted Them In ''Codex''.. ^ Pretty good opener, nothing special U Wouldnt Even ''Cum'' With A ''Hot Spit'' If U Performed ''Oral Sex''.. You So Dumb You'd Miss The ''Point'' Of My Disses Even If They Were Marked With A 50 Foot ''X''... ^ Terribly streched, bad flow, no good punch Your Records Got U In ''Dreamland'' Like Your Part Of The MATRIX.. This Kids Steppin To ''Sick'' Rhymes That'll Leave U Needin ''Pediatrics''... ^ Rhymes badly, aight concept though If My Verse Is ''Tighter'' Then I Hope Like Some U Dont Resort To ''Dick Ridin'' As Your TACTICS.. I'ma ''Disable'' Ya Flow n Have U Postin In The Thread Thats Strictly For ''Spastics'' ^ Didn't make much sence This The ''Writers Block'' An Your Sentenced To ''Life With A Pen''.. After This Verse 'NOW NIGGUHS NOTHIN' Is Why They Call You 'Triple N!!' ^ Nice closer Overall 6.5/7 This was a close battle. Vote- Triple N |
Triple_N
Like deflated parachutes leavin' ya on "ground" Imitatin' "russian rulet losers," only good for 1 round setup line was blah...punch was sick...if you had the time to really think this out i know it wouldve been sick as hell Like "white bigots" on da police force I "shot-a-boy" If ya vying for victory why can't I spot-a-ploy nah... U lose more then "lifers" do of there lifetime U couldn't spue hot shit if ya deficated on a mine this shit had me laughin...again with the blahness in the setup but not as bad this time...good punch You must crossbreed ya verses, dogyear rhymes 7 to 1 winnin' ratio, only infants been "KOed" more times its walking the line between creative and corny...its ok but not the best... All ya dope is sticks an stems, drop dimebags of self lies U could put "mike hawk" on stilts an not "rank" high pretty good closer... this was good for a key...not a stellar verse but not that bad...id say mediocre...i see little seedlings of dopeness everywhere but not much is developed...pretty good punches..decent flow...alright verse altogether... Dopeman Dogg I'm So Complex When I Step In The Ring They Renamed Me ''Mr.PERPLEX''... Nobody Would Feel Your ''Scriptures'' Even If U Posted Them In ''Codex''.. my blahness meter exploded...what is codex?.."mr.perplex" is kinda corny...plus it doesnt rhyme U Wouldnt Even ''Cum'' With A ''Hot Spit'' If U Performed ''Oral Sex''.. You So Dumb You'd Miss The ''Point'' Of My Disses Even If They Were Marked With A 50 Foot ''X''... *borrows another blahness meter from For$aken*...ok let me start by saying *blahness meter explodes* GOD DAMN IT! umm...oral sex/spit lines are on the first page of the played rhymes book...the punch was mediocre but the setup totally ruined it... Your Records Got U In ''Dreamland'' Like Your Part Of The MATRIX.. This Kids Steppin To ''Sick'' Rhymes That'll Leave U Needin ''Pediatrics''... here you go you are coming around...this was better...the rhyming is weak but i want it to work for you so ill give you a pat on the back for this one...you are starting to think outside the box here which will eventually develop into being a sick rhymer...not here yet with this but im starting to see potential... If My Verse Is ''Tighter'' Then I Hope Like Some U Dont Resort To ''Dick Ridin'' As Your TACTICS.. I'ma ''Disable'' Ya Flow n Have U Postin In The Thread Thats Strictly For ''Spastics'' no... This The ''Writers Block'' An Your Sentenced To ''Life With A Pen''.. After This Verse 'NOW NIGGUHS NOTHIN' Is Why They Call You 'Triple N!!' "(n word)(n word)(n word) is why they call you triple-n" is played but ill assume you werent aware of that...good thought in the begginning but it wasnt hard-hitting...second line was blah... i know i sounded hard on that but just laugh it off thats how i am...your flow is fucked but not as fucked as theyd have you believe...i know exactly what you did...you wrote it bar by bar concept by concept and never went back and read the whole thing...i have the same problem sometimes you just have to go back and look at what you are doing...your verse wasnt terrible but it wasnt good either...you need more practice you arent ready for writers block...i dont hate im just giving you advice...do what you want with it... v/Triple N...better punches and an overall feeling of being more streamlined and less scatterbrained |
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