Young Dez vs whitegold
 

aight we'll play by ure rules, u spit first though, i'll spit after u, how soon depends on when i'm on da site aight, u got a max of 5 days, and i've got a max of 3 days after ure done

no crew votes
no d/r
10 lines
no biting
people can poll vote if they have 15+ posts

aight lets see wutchu got

Im not in The Matrix but Im the one Like Neo
to tell dat dis kid is whack I ain't gotta call miss Cleo
In dis battle I'll whoop yo ass like I'm Ike and u Tina Turner
I don't know whether to give my 10 lines or slap u wit da burner
don't come at me wit no whack rhymes
cuz i got punchlines dat will hit u harder then Mike tyson in his prime
for battling young dez u must be insane
for doin stupid shit like dat I'll slap u like my name Rick James
beef wit me don't even try unless u wanna die
cuz i got hammerz cocked liked debo's eye
dis kid whitegold is pussy he was scared to start
he like the Tin man off the wizard of Oz cause he has no heart
after readin my rhymes battling ain't even necessary
u mite as well dig yoself an early grave and lay down in da cemetary

dis bitch come here expectin to win with his fake ass punches/
this kid is just spittin out celebrities, by the bunches/
so why do u try to beat me with fake lines/
o heres one ure as fake as pamelas boobs in there prime/
u try pickin up fights to try to make a "punchline"/
your as wack as two carrots, 4 rats rapping combined/
i thought i told u once to go home man, ure illaterate/
ure like a fuckin toilet, cause u take all this shit/
ure rap wasn't really a rap it was more of a skit/
ure a bitch, the fuckin puppet and i'm the vantriliquist/
i can tell u tried to bury me, but with the grave u missed/
o shit ure mom jus called i better leave/
she offerin a 3 night stay wit her, all accomidations are free/

yo uppin 4 some votes.............................

-Youngdez.
Im not in The Matrix but Im the one Like Neo
to tell dat dis kid is whack I ain't gotta call miss Cleo
average flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
In dis battle I'll whoop yo ass like I'm Ike and u Tina Turner
I don't know whether to give my 10 lines or slap u wit da burner
coo multi with the flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
don't come at me wit no whack rhymes
cuz i got punchlines dat will hit u harder then Mike tyson in his prime
average flow, good wordplay, aight punch
for battling young dez u must be insane
for doin stupid shit like dat I'll slap u like my name Rick James
average flow, aight wordplay, played out punchline
beef wit me don't even try unless u wanna die
cuz i got hammerz cocked liked debo's eye
average flow, good wordplay, decent punch
dis kid whitegold is pussy he was scared to start
he like the Tin man off the wizard of Oz cause he has no heart
average flow, coo wordplay, coo punch
after readin my rhymes battling ain't even necessary
u mite as well dig yoself an early grave and lay down in da cemetary
average flow, weak wordplay, weak punch


-Whitegold.
dis bitch come here expectin to win with his fake ass punches/
this kid is just spittin out celebrities, by the bunches/
average flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
so why do u try to beat me with fake lines/
o heres one ure as fake as pamelas boobs in there prime/
average flow, aight wordplay, played out punch
u try pickin up fights to try to make a "punchline"/
your as wack as two carrots, 4 rats rapping combined/
average flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
i thought i told u once to go home man, ure illaterate/
ure like a fuckin toilet, cause u take all this shit/
ure rap wasn't really a rap it was more of a skit/
average flow, coo wordplay, played out punch
ure a bitch, the fuckin puppet and i'm the vantriliquist/
i can tell u tried to bury me, but with the grave u missed/
coo flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
o shit ure mom jus called i better leave/
she offerin a 3 night stay wit her, all accomidations are free/
average flow, weak wordplay, weak punch


Overall, Dez got this. He had the better punches and wordplay. White, work on your creativity, flow, and wordplay. Dez, work on your creativity and flow aswell. Both of you should work on just going set up as the first line, the punch as the second line. Keep at it.

vote - Youngdez.

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ill drop an honest vote in this battle if u drop an honest vote in this battle first http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133281

ill drop a vote if u drop an honest vote on this battle first http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133281

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ayo wats good can we get some votes on here ......

Yo, please vote on these for me....
Me vs RV
Me vs Poetic Justice

I vote for Young Dez, better wordplay, creativity and puches

wordplay - young
metaz - young
flow - young
punchlines - young

vote - young dez

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Young Dez
structure wasnt to good...ur lines seemed like they were just goin everywhere...flow fell off cause of ur structure...u had a few metas...wordplay was pretty good...some of ur punches connected...no good personals...

whitegold
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...thats newbish...structure wasnt very good...ur lines weaved in and out of bein considered stretched though...flow fell off cause of the structure...u had a few metas...wordplay was wack...a few, at best, of ur punches connected...no good personals...

Overall
both had a few metas...neither had good personals...neither had a good structure....neither had a good flow...Young Dez more, and better wordplay...as well as more connecting punches...so basing off of that...Young Dez gets my vote...

VOTE - YOUNG DEZ

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