mysterioso vs. chao
 

15 line max
5 wins
3-0 ko
no d/r, hate, or crew votes

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here it goez
 

Yo

Ima rip this kid and leave him in the after life
unlike elvis sightings he ain't gon' be seen after life/
ima cold zoned nigga like i just killed u at a hockey rink
i got that sprocket that makes this nigga think/
what did u think i would be a easy loss to forget
u couldn't target your girl if you had a sponsor of target/
matter of fact nigga just make sure you keep me in tact you see
even if u was american airlines and i was a contract u couldn't land me/
i can look and see ur style is in a rust
u couldn't beat me now if the W was left in a trust/
come hard or bust~in this battle im like a kid n u like a bus~not even young'ns respect u~they reject u ~inspect u~and in this battle i just digest u~and shit u out like yesterdayz lunch

MYSTERIOSO this whack emcee, shoulda knew better to battle me
i'm gonna merk this kid and hurt his pride, your losin to a newbie
with flows like his my guess he has to ride dick
only way for this kid to be ill, is to get really sick
i'mma burn you like i'm hot and i'm on fuckin fire
votes gonna be 5-0, and i betcha i'm the one gon be higher
so you say your from flint, here let me give ya a hint
i just merked you so fast, you didn't even see the glint
get some of your friends, and yo i'll beat your whole cattle
cause if there anything like you, you can bet i'll win some more battles
fuck this i'm through wit you, man you shoulda knew
messin with chao will get you a loss, man you never had a clue

first battle, and just realized i can't... hahaha whack as fuck
o well

vote on this shiat
peace

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Aight... here it is
Metaphors, Vocab, Flow (even though it wasn't that hot), and everything go to Mysterioso....
He came out punchin'... and it wasn't half bad either. HE still need to elevate
Chao... you need to keep writin'... your style is wack dogg. Check out the Wackness Emergency Center. If you keep writin' you'll get better. That's how I did it, thats how everyone else did it, and how you CAN do it.
Vote-Mysterioso... Good punches & Metaphors, plus Vocab... work on your structure though.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

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chao jst bout takes dis.tied on most things but if fink chao jst edged it.keep it up both of u's
V/CHAO
PLZ RETURN DA FAVA:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110860

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come on yall quit sleepin letz get some votes in
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Your excessively uppin man and for a bat that wasnt all to great anyway but fuckit im votin..

Flow- Chao's was alot smoother and ran through it better, Mysterioso your syllable count was really off on some of your lines man and the flow was just too choppy to read nicely, lines were like complete different lengths.

Punches- Here I liked Mysterioso better I mean Chao had a couple good ones but Mysterioso's was pretty hot like the American Airlines one and the one bout Target...even thou they kinda didn't make sense they was nice

Personals- I'm thinkin this one would have to go to Chao since the only personal I caught in either of your verses was Chao's bar about Myst bein from Flint..

Multies- I don't think Chao even had any multies, caught a few in Mysteriosos verse, they weren't anything special but they was alright

Vocab- Here's where I felt both of you was lackin, all of your rhyming words were either too played or just plain too simple..try to come up with more sophisticated words or words that'll set the opponent up for better punches "fire" and "higher", "rink" and "think", yall can do better

Originality- Neither of the verses really brought anything new to the table, although I thought some of Mysterioso's stuff was aite none of it made me smile like i usually do when i see some hot new concepts for verses...blah

Overall- This was a hard vote since both verses were pretty weak...Mysterioso had stronger punches and..I suppose better vocab?...the flow wasn't too good but the punches just bought him my vote, my vote goes for Mysterioso