Top of the dome kid critique homie
 

havent been on here in a while but here goes...

lyrically inclined, its almost as if im lyrically designed, to change youre emotions one line at a time/
shits potent, lyrics leave ya throat swollen, im a king pin boyyyyy..leave ya folks bowlin/
cuz you better believe i stay sellin them 8 balls,and ya grl not nice, she got great flaws, sex game not on point but she got great jaws, hold on, wait, pause,she like me im a bad boyyyy, i break laws haha/

fuck witcha boyyyy i dunno what u heard, im from the city baby, i dont fuck with them burbs/
broad daylight you be lookin at homicide, gotta 68 cutlas wit 22s on da ride, and ya bitch gone nigga she on my side/
she came to me homie like my mans dont know how to fuck me, so i told this trick hold up then beat that shit up now its lookin like lunch meat, and i stay high, so when i get them munchies, i dig in for a taste of that old country, cuz im from cunshy , where we lay the pipe, and if we aint layin pipe haha you better believe we layin pipe ;) all these ho's they can ride my sleigh tonight, we dont like dui's so you can stay the night, fuck er to the left fuck er to the right, she sucked my dick till the...wait i am white,

haha im done yo so rusty

That was super awesome, bruv.

ya fo rickle ma nickel

bridge. jump off.

I called my man Dwight, just to see what was shakin'.

Yo, Mike. Our city is dope and pretty.

DUDE YOU'RE SO FUCKIN DOPE!!

Bro you should totally go after a career in rap music, quit whatever job you have if that was just a freestyle cuz it was that fiyah!!

This was the shit.

"I'm from the city baby, I don't fuck with them burbs"
Fire.

whoaaaaa .

wrong forum to post rhymes bud..

n work on writing to a beat & keeping a rhythem with your syllable counts.