dont know what happened to my other piece musta got deleted
 

god bless america but why we in war all the time
we gotta hustle to survive but they say its a crime
lock us up when all we do is try to provide
but i pledge the allegiance to a flag that aint mine.
i just wanna know when is it all gonna end
no more watchin our backs takin bullets for our friends
but it wont never stop its just the way thangs go
its just more wood for the fire,more spit for my flow
its to a point now where i dont give a damn about shit
only me myself and i thats all thats it
trust very few cause i was bred that way
always sat and peeped shit while the other kids played
the quiet ones are the most dangerous is what i always heard
i dont bark unless u tempt me but when i strike it burns
so dont fuck with the ill minded u get urs ill get mine
just dont fuck with the ill minded or ill have to re-route ur spine
its a hard knock life for us all just play ur cards how their givin
just dont make a bad play and find urself up in prison
behind bars aint a place for no man with a dream
cause thats a evil hearted place where barely no one succeds
take it from me ive done my time and plenty
juvi bootcamps,ydc's,county jails-ive done it
now im back on rebound that shits old this shits new
im goin for glory no more drama im through

that was pretty tite. keep up the good work. u should start battlin cuz ur better than half the peeps on this site w/ a 10-0 record. haha

yo can i get sommore feedback

ya that shit was real homie, but like you said it will never change--since youre new like me make sure you read and folow the rules in here or they will kick you off like my potna BOMBATOMIK, he didn't read the rules and he fucked up. now they won't let'em back on. good thing for rapbattles.com though, b-cuz now their losing records can't be effected.

can i get somemore feedback people,let me know what u think

this was a decent drop.............u had a good rhyme scheme but u should try to up your vocab a lil bit..........other than that this piece was on point