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-fallen Friend-
-fallen friend- you were racing down highway 41 ,car to car suppose to exit off but never made it that far the car got outta control started running like shit having fun one moment,the next your car flips thats bullshit,you were the only one pinned under neath the only thing sticking out was your feet and while i was at home sleeping my homie my friend was stuck in a car bleeding the 2 others made it out of the car screaming out of stress when the ambulance came you fell into cardiac arrest i cant gettit off my chest.. i should of been there,to encourage you not to race now your laying in the E.R with blood all over your body and face next day get a call from my cousin saying get the news paper....cant believe what i read seen the 4 lines that said 18 year old is dead........ -pauses- i cant believe what im hearing,this is crazy then gotta call from his mom crying and stating- why did god have to reach out and take my baby away crying my self coudn't think of the words to say my friends life was tookin ,hes now da-ceased *whispers*mah homie JAYTEE rest in peace |
aww, i'm so sorry about you're friend, racing huh? i'ts popular up here in NY too, this was a well written piece to say the least, and i'm glad you can release this off your chest, it's one step closer to excepting this, well done, and keep ya head up!
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Thanx Very Much
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shyt's rough... i lost plenty of friends in NY due to different shyt.... my man Rob just started college and was playing ball in the gym.. collapsed and died right there on the court... my other boy got shot answering his doorbell...point blank range in the chest... died in my man Wayne's arms... i know how it feels to lose a friend... shyt's rough... glad to see ya doing sum'n constructive with ya pain and keeping his memory alive for all who loved him... good shyt, yo!
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thanx uppin for more feed
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this is a good poem
and i need feedback man |
upping
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damn...dat is some really deep shyt...nice vocab and flow...not much more 2 say otha than i'm sorry fa ya loss...peace 1
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thanx
uppin |
Feeling that,,. Nice work V thats shits hard to come to terms
with. I was in a crash racing about two years ago, I stoped after that shit.. R.I.P JayTee 1~ |
nice drop dawg, I have a brother that races and we had some close calls and its hearin stuff like this that makes people see its not all about credibility, death is involved. But very nice drop could tell you ment it by the lil captions sayin "puases" and "whispers." I really like this, and I see its a tuff subject to write about. So I will pray for ya and ur family and ur friends family. But one things fa sure, you hafta keep ya head to God and pray man, God Bless, nice drop.
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R.I.P. Jaytee.. Valor that poem was very emotionally relieved.. you have truly out-done yourself.. nice drop RV's Poet (the real one).... not just a story it's life, keep up ya work..
~wun~ |
Dats messed up about ya friend dawg...this piece did him justice cuz it was very well written I can feel the emotion of it, imagery was great, I liked it...u really put emotion in it an dat alwasy shows thru.
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thanx yall
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wow valor...your better then me? how'd dat possible..lol j/p.. but wow... this was a hot piece..i could actually picture wut was happen'n whilre reading it...wish there were more poems liKe dis in da future ;)
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