Quiet Storm freestyle
 

yup just a quick lil thing, if you heard my first freestyle its on the list there so listen to it if ya want, but this ones wit a beat, anyway enjoy

www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05

links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2437824
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2437841

listening.....you kinda mess up at the beginning and use the same concept twice lol....

but...as u keep going...you get better with your frees.....which is good....you still seem a lil bit uncomforatable behind the mic....but actually better than most when they first start out....which is also a good sign......you got a pretty good voice...but thatll also become better with time....only thing i really disliked...was u saying motherfucker tons at the end lol.....but other than that...not a bad freestyle....keep workin and youll turn out pretty good man....just keep elevating

Like he sadi kinda messd up, this was pretty good keep it up, it is a freestyle so you cant break it down as a proppa track but flow is kinda on and off nah mean, up your mic presence,

RTF here:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208657
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208553

RTF to those please

What up homey? Its Young Franchize.... the beginning was okay, you start to mess up, you sound like your nervous, start to slurr your words, But Guess thats normal sometimes. But sometimes you didnt make sense, just keep practicing.. do ya thing...1 uNo

i think i made ltos of sense, you just are a bad writer so you wouldnt understand maybe,

anyways thanks for the feed

uppin.

^havent you ever heard Quiet Wtorm fuck yall need to open ya ears, and dont reply about the beat i dont care about it, just as long as its good. fuck

uppin

Yo. Dawg, your right. You do make sense, but its irrelevant. It makes your flow sound weird because one time your talkin' about how blaze faster then blunts or sumthin. next minute ur sayin' something about how you hold imaginary glocks... C'mon man... Anyways I'm out... PEEP MY NEW TRACK PPL!! http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208669