just felt like killin it!!!
 

girls light up when i hit it like a box of matches/
songs got so many punches,till i spit boxin matches/
no performin' for applause, u wack? & still get clapped up/
got a bullet for ya head that'll make ya STARTER cap, BACK-UP/
my whole crew is some caught up peers/
who'll put the razr to ya face when u aint got a call or beard/
aint got no movement G's behind u on/
disrespect the HUSTLE?, & get treated like phat a$$, GRINDED on/
i'm a cold G so b4 u see me, put on ya heat/
or end up layin' in shells like u got put on a beach/
all u do is front like them thangs they put on thier teeth/
i'll get'chu stretched like u was tryna reach/
yawn or sumthin', so fresh and we stronger than beach/
dawn or sumthin', put bullets out like they tryna leave/
gone for sumthin', like parkin meters how the metal got'chu runnin'/
but i'm the foundation, ain't leavin' for nufin'/
so all u can do is dig me/
and ya girl, i kills it when i lick-'er(liqour) like kidneys/
hustler, and product gettin' marked up like clumbsy kids knees/
y'all more the type to play house wit' a rat, like disney/
i hear y'all sayin' its a mouse, but its the same3 to me/
i'm real so new clothes is all thats changin' me/
plus ya plans is plain ta see/
cuz like dipset y'all bammas just tryna get from "A!"(juelz) ta "B"(cam)/
no diss to 'em but i just had ta sample/
this fire, y'all smokin' like half a camel/
shut'chu down yet leave ya chest open like half a sandal/
and put fire on wax, this line is half a candle/
got gangsta girls around the world from damu, ta shamu/
that stay wet all over my head like shampoo/
so if ya shawty outta line than she can get blammed too/
like indoor track meets, y'all bammas gettin' ran thru/
y'all rappers dont shoot mags, u shoot pics for magazines/
rappin' hard when inside u mo shook than eve's tambourine/
they call me hot line judgin' by my raps and rings/
wit' cash i'm like popeye, cuz u gone lose when i pull out the green/
for girls u do like kevin, prolly fed-'er-lines/
she'll tolerate urs today but she'd rather mine/
cuz just gettin' a watch from me is spendin' better time/
y'all like broke blenders, aint gone never grind/
fast money dont last, i'd rather slow mo dough/
cuz lines cumin' off my head like thangs that i dont know no mo/
bammas get gassed up for toe-ta-toe/
but i'll get'cha boy beat like feet at a go-go show/
advice, stay off the site or i'll delete'cha/
but'chall the type who wouldn't get a tip if y'all delivered a pizza/
i got mo rollaz than skate teams/
but i'll give the BLUES to y'all YELLOW bellies for the GREEN/

shut'chu down yet leave ya chest open like half a sandal/

^ wtf

Not bad, except for the sandle line. It really has no point though, You know? There is no direction to it.

thew camel and sandal lines were subliminals to jay-z just like the a to B line was subliminals to dipset. it was just random punchlines showing off my punchlines and wordplay skillz tho. so think of it as a subliminal battle verse.

.... i see u tryin to be creative with punches sort of like what i try to do with mines lol....i say make them more catchy so others can understand them better cause only in "your own mind" can u understand what you talkin bout if u dont break it down...define it...or make it more catchy others wont understand so they'll be like "wtf"...like i understood what u ment by that "half a sandle line"....in my own way when i thought about it....but at the same time its not catchy and it can seem as if it doesn't make sense....people just dont think that way if u see what i mean....ehh dunno if i explained this shit right to u but u might get it lolz.....good shit in all though i liked it 8/10....~1~

when i look at you,
i remeber why im here tonite,
its all becasue of you and your white lies,
cant stand the pain of saying my good byes,
you cant go your seperate way,
your so beatiful i just cant turn away,
but all i hear is screamin coming from you rite now,
i odnt know what to say,girl i just dont know how,
but i know even if i tried to say something, yuh wouldnt hear it,
next hing i hears the engine blarring, asked you why where you going,
just turned and looked at me and said nuthing,
now im jus here standing and looking around of what i have left of this world
nothing around me feel any betterof this transformed girl
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bullet....why did u post this here ? lolz....start another thread or post this under "keystyle your heart out" in the cypher section...not under someone elses thread they dropped there piece on.....~1~

i get'chu man, thankx for the advice...

hah igiht yo my bad...lol