SnypeR-vs-Lil Rip
 

8-15 bars
no bitin..............
no recylcing..............
verse due at 6:00

checkin in................................................ ...

Rip Checking In.............................................you Drop First

SHIT I'LL GO
RIP VERSE

I'm going to slauter tray-six starting with you// then when i finish I'm coming for the crew// you see I'll run in your house and grab your mom by the hair// tell the rest of your family to get on the ground so TRAY-SIX beware// unpredictible but ill on this shit// I'm a one man army and aiming for your click// caue ou see i'm a body masucuter// a nigga quick to shoot you// dout make me grab my ruger// and straight take it to ya// so don't think that I'm some lite work// cause i'll get after you like child surport// that right a hard nigga talking that trash// put a bullet in you like miceal jackson in a little boy ass//

on you uppin

A quick one...................

YO..............

nigga when my glock-cocks it'll make you pop-lock/
like joe buddens i make you “drop-drop” get sizzled like pop-rocks/
like a daycare arsonist i burn kids/
when will you learn-kid, here take this beatin cus you earned-it/
ya rhymes remind of a SHERM-HEAD, you worthless faggot/
i'm murderin you son...this verse-is-tragic/
words-is-magic...you maggot you get murked-with-addlibs/
you trash-kid, call you afflack cus you duckin-me/
you faggot, you got a dick...you cant fuck-wit-me/
bitin my style...like nas you “wanna-be-me”/
fuckin cock suckin bitch...get the that cum out ya teeth/

Im breakin my verse down...

1.) Wordplay - Tray 6
2.) Rhyme Scheme's - Tray 6
3.) Switch-Ups -None
4.) Multies (Multy-Rhyming Syllabuls) - Rip
5.) Punches - Tray 6
6.) Personals - None
7.) Flow - Rip
8.) Punctuation - Tray 6

May seem like a bias vote but i enjoyed reading through this. Good battle but Tray just took it.

Peace out

Thanx dawg, but u Forgot to poll vote^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

yall both did good but i think snypeR got this battle
punches good
personal none that i saw wuz good
structure wuz good
my vote is snypeR

sniper most respect that shit was on point try to vote on some of my other battles

Lil Rip....Your verse lacked structured, and structure is a key concept in netcee battling, cause the reader wants to flow through your verse..........work on that, and the reast will follow............2.5/10

SnypeR......You mad nice...........your verse was straight to the point........and I like the way you put flow in that short verse...nice.......But I've 100 times better from you.............6/10

Thanx for the props rip............................

hey i give props where props are due be honest i would vote for you to if i could

Lil Rip ~ Toon was basically right, your rap looked more like a short essay or a long paragraph. Need to fix that for sure. Nothing to great really stood out to me, although the ending was good, MJ line. You ok man.

SnypeR ~ Liked your stuff, structure was obviously better, and multis were a lil played out at times but not bad.

TO BOTH, it usually helps with personals if you can make plays on their name somehow. Just a sugesstion.

Vote: SnypeR

Plz hit this back up..
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=116008

lil rip is wack as hell he cant spit to save his life

thanx for the love ya'll.............^^^were ya sig Lift?