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"My Little Insecurities" ft. OneStepBeyond
[[Verse One: Atticus]]
Cold... So Self Aware Nearly Swelled With Null Pain There Remains No Clearly Well, Hell All Fates Fallin Dull. Full With Great Opportunities Dropped Late Pages Erased Scribbled Blank Classics Seem Lacluster, To Muster Greatness Deems Its Placement As This Obsene Dream... Lavish Covers Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder- Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run Through A Life Of Light Blind To Strive With Eyes Fused Up. As I Search For Comfort... Last Resort To Sore Is Some Form More Or Less More Less Than More Yet The Love Makes This One A Whore. Hunt For The Touch Of Anyone One That Can Form The Sence Of Sudden Abundance... Fuck Me! Free Me From Poor Judgments! [[Chorus x2]] Inpurity, How Pure They See... Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance To Please My Little Insecurities Rants. [[Verse Two: OneStepBeyond]] My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists, Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist, Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix, I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix, Can't juggle the shits, so the pressure on my shoulder builds, Yet to have soul instilled... still showing colder shrills, Sposed to be a souljah, losing prides giving me colder chills, Bottle up my firing emotions and when the molten builds, One day they explode, flaming, burning, igniting the fuse, fighting the fueds within myself, i'm frightened to choose, Wether to change my life, but I descent still to badness, The ability to do so is there... but my will is absent... [[Chorus x2]] Inpurity, How Pure They See... Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance To Please My Little Insecurities Rants. [[Verse Three: Atticus]] Drift Through Days In Haze Of Blur Blue Shades Asume A Tune That Drones Quick In Flash... Come To Play A Few Hours Past... Waste Away The Class My Last Grade A Fail Stale Brained... Maine's Influence Henced That Blaze Of Smoke, Clouds Dround Out The Sounds Of Hope Beyond The Pond Of Poison Possitioned In This Frown Of Rope. The Drugs My Freedom Fiefdom Of Peace Piece Of Mind Just Dug Its Grave-Lay-Pray One Day The Gates Free A Bind. Now The Highs Familiar Still Your Frown Finds Out How To Renounce This Drugs Feel Your Fucked, So You Cut Down To Cut... "OOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!" ------------------------- Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...3589post2173589 |
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dope drop great vocab and flow i liked this drop yall busted this up
ill be readin more of your drops atticus good stuff homie 9/10 one of tha best and most complex ive read yet...... |
This was a tight drop.. i was really feelin it ,
Nice structurte from both .. very good vocab and wordplay from atticus , onestep ya verse was pretty simple , but it was good , both had nice imagery , i could image what was happening when you said it in your drop.. Nice emotions from both.. this was a really good collabo , Nice job from both keep it up |
this was a pretty nice piece.....had good emotion....imagry was aiight
atticus had good vocab and wordplay....i like how some lines just flowed right off my tongue........good structure and i liked the topic for this collab...... onestep you flow was good....good emotions....structure was good.....you need to throw in some better vocab....it was good but it coulda been a lil better.......this was a good collab tho keep it up fellas |
Nice concept you worked with here, don't think I have seen it being used before on RV. Both had nice pieces, Atticus picked up pace bit more but he had more opportunity to show his talent of course. I was feeling the imagery of course, especially in chorus and the emotion was strong and pure. Was feeling the flow and had some insightful lines in there that made me think about shit
For instance: Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run Through A Life Of Light Blind To Strive With Eyes Fused Up. ^nice lines... Keep it up boys and rtf on my open mic please (link in sig)... |
Yeah Atticus...dat was cool..u dropped some complex shit there!Multies were off d hook man! Waitin 4 d audio.....
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Wow Nice Nice IM Loving This Although I dont Like OSB you got some nice OM talent No need to lie so Id like to say that the topic was nice and the concept was very complex which gave it that xtra edge....i dont see why its gettin slept on some nice work keep it up RTF in any Way Possible (preferably My Battles) |
I liked OSB's verse...both had pretty dope drops. The verses comingled well, vocabulary was fine. Good multis, nice concept... Keep dropping pieces like this. Sound pretty good in audio. Favorite Lines:
Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix, I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix, ___ Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder- Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run |
.....ight fam that was a hot drop yah came wit real shit....i really felt the hook it was different i liked that u both came wit perfect structure...the vocab in both verse were perfect for a drop like this Real Talk the whole time....the last verse i give props to Atticus he ended it wit a fire verse to leave a point....also osb came good wit his verse....My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists,
Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist.... ^^^this line was hot.... This was a good idea by both of yah.....an u did it perfect....9/10....an thats really good from me ...i tell the truth striaght out..ight..1 |
shit that was a hot callabo right there....
structure was great vocab was great thats some real good OM talent keep it up both of you...good things are in your future 9/10 |
yeah this was heavy stuff!! lol i dont really read all the open mics as much but im glad i read this! lots of tight vocabulary and very nice original lines from both! i preferred atticus's second verse as i feel it flowed better as the first one was more poetic! OSB jus killed it! lol, this is one of the best om's i've read so far!
Bottle up my firing emotions and when the molten builds, One day they explode, flaming, burning, igniting the fuse, fighting the fueds within myself, i'm frightened to choose, ^^these were my favourite lines from OSB, i dont no y, i suppose we all can identify with those feelins and i liked the way he described them Lavish Covers Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder- Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's" ^^favourite lines from Atticus, lol this was deep man keep this up! u 2 should collab more often both of ur styles worked well together as atticus's was more poetry based and complex, OSB jus came wit it n hit hard n used simpler but effective vocabulary! Thats my opinion anyway! :thumbup: |
GOTDAMN!...Damn...Damn...Damn Dat Was Flames On Both Side...Luv'd Da Chorus Too Dat Shit Was Serious
Atticus You Used Alotta Imagery, Vocab, Nice Structure...Wordplay Was On Point Fareal OSB You Used Imagery Also, Nice Wordplay, Structure Was Fine...You Laced Ya Shit Real Talk...One Of Da Best OM's I've Read So Far...Keep It Up Niggaz $cream At Me |
:eek: :shocked: :thumbup: WOW. amazing shit right here... attitcus, you had str8 multies, and nice rhyming, nothing seemed forced, sounded like some str8 nas level shit... dope def....
OSB, daaayyyummmm killeed this!, deep emotional type words like i could picture scarface and this... dope to the max... nice drop yall everything was on point, flow, topic, structure, great OM... damn, good drop!! |
Wow I am really feeling this shit here...Most definetly an OM of the week nominee
Real deep shit from both, feeling the vocab and imagery put into this...Nice topic, very creative I loved the concept, and I am really looking forward to another one from you two... Very nice RTF and hit up my battle with Skriptz whenever... |
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