jayjordan vs. datfagjay
 

15 bar max
no ridin
due tonight
you using my name and talk alot of shit lets see you back it up

word is that you a biter,they pm me and told me watch out for your sorry ass.but im checkin in

ill have mine in 20,we gone see who the real jay is and i aint no biter

lolz dat boy jay is one ov my boiz man jay jordan ya gunna get smoked enjoy ya loose

sorry i didnt post last night i was trying to give you time to write something

ill cut you with a razorblade infected with hiv and watch you bleed from ya belly button down to your ankles/you a newb and you still suck,duck run and shoot/you cant touch my crew/i dont have one so im by myself/your life is in danger watch your health/15 bars i meant half of one how you gone battle me im the choosen one.

now what ill check back in about 12 have your stuff rookie

hahahaha!and to think i was going to write something for this battle.im just gone free write now cuz its not worth good lyrics,heres something simple.

ill take your own razorblade and cut out your stamina/
cutting up your soul like the medical examiner/
nike check on your head having your face meet asphalt/
you lost another battle now that was your ass fault/
you thought this was an easy win but you still at zero/
what would you expect as micheal jackson as your hero/
your verse is boring ill retire you like JORDAN/
youll get merked like jam master JAY/
this was like the easiest battle ive ever had on rb till this day.

something simple but enough to merk you

ill cut you with a razorblade infected with hiv and watch you bleed from ya belly button down to your ankles/you a newb and you still suck,duck run and shoot/you cant touch my crew/i dont have one so im by myself/your life is in danger watch your health/15 bars i meant half of one how you gone battle me im the choosen one.

Ok for one... No structure. For two How does this make sense?"you cant touch my crew/i dont have one so im by myself" Weak ass verse man... Elevate much if you want to have a strong left side...Wins that is

ill take your own razorblade and cut out your stamina/
cutting up your soul like the medical examiner/
nike check on your head having your face meet asphalt/
you lost another battle now that was your ass fault/
you thought this was an easy win but you still at zero/
what would you expect as micheal jackson as your hero/
your verse is boring ill retire you like JORDAN/
youll get merked like jam master JAY/
this was like the easiest battle ive ever had on rb till this day.

It wasn't good. Like you said it was simple. But def. enough to beat the kid that used the razorblade thing in his verse in two different battles. Better structure... And pretty much it weak everything else, but enough to be nothing right :p

Vote DatBoyJay

like i said something simple enough to win this battle thats all i was doing

come on yall can we please vote,how do you expect people to vote for your battles

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ill cut you with a razorblade infected with hiv and watch you bleed from ya belly button down to your ankles/you a newb and you still suck,duck run and shoot/you cant touch my crew/i dont have one so im by myself/your life is in danger watch your health/15 bars i meant half of one how you gone battle me im the choosen one.

absolute shit. looks like ya got ya 4 year old sister to write that on for ya

ill take your own razorblade and cut out your stamina/
cutting up your soul like the medical examiner/
nike check on your head having your face meet asphalt/
you lost another battle now that was your ass fault/
you thought this was an easy win but you still at zero/
what would you expect as micheal jackson as your hero/
your verse is boring ill retire you like JORDAN/
youll get merked like jam master JAY/
this was like the easiest battle ive ever had on rb till this day.

not great but easily enought for the win

vote on this one pls
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=115505

Can We Plz Vote If You Do At The Same Moment I Will Vote On Your Battle

yo both flows sucked.....
they both lacked metaphors and multis....
both of yall work on your vocabulary,metas,multis,personals, and punches...
But DatBoyJay was good enough to beat Jordan's.....soooooooooooo.
My vote =Datboyjay

and yo both ya''ll need to try and make 10 lines or more.... Just keep at it and both of you will get better...

ill cut you with a razorblade infected with hiv and watch you bleed from ya belly button down to your ankles/you a newb and you still suck,duck run and shoot/you cant touch my crew/i dont have one so im by myself/your life is in danger watch your health/15 bars i meant half of one how you gone battle me im the choosen one.

shit yo you need mad help with everything with time anmd practice you'll get there
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hahahaha!and to think i was going to write something for this battle.im just gone free write now cuz its not worth good lyrics,heres something simple.

ill take your own razorblade and cut out your stamina/
cutting up your soul like the medical examiner/
nike check on your head having your face meet asphalt/
you lost another battle now that was your ass fault/
you thought this was an easy win but you still at zero/
what would you expect as micheal jackson as your hero/
your verse is boring ill retire you like JORDAN/
youll get merked like jam master JAY/
this was like the easiest battle ive ever had on rb till this day.

something simple but enough to merk you

well much betta flow structure pounches blah
my vote goes to DatBoyJay for a betta verse

return yourtime to my battle in my sig