JpMoney06 vs lilchiofthachi
 

Battle Rules:

5 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-27-04 at 08:38 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

lilchiofthachi has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-04 08:39 PM.

JpMoNeY06 has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-04 08:42 PM.

lite me up a cigarette so i can start this show/ready to begin with the illest of ill flows/drop a verse like it ain't nuttin/bitches like you r why they made up the word FRONTIN/to worried bout losin and not winnin/you shoulda known that u were gunna lose from the beginnin/wut u gotta run?/i'll take u and ya crews ass, one by one/i can't be defeated so just face it/betta take ya life and erase it/u can't reach my level of rappin/and yes that was ya gurl i just got done tappin/she was great, she gotta nice ass/do u remember that shit from way back in the past/bitch get on ya knees cause u can't last/ima give u the last blast/this battle is over, face it u suck/maybe next time u'll have better luck

This nigga Jp money think he on my level,
take his honeys and stand tall like a rebel/
This nigga jacks off 2 gay porn on da internet,
poor nigga all his shit at home is a renter set/
i dont think nigga kno he fuckin wit Chi's God,
rhymes creative thats y im editor in tha Squad/
U better post a hot verse if u wanna beat me,
ask ur sergent he gone say u gotta retreat G/
If niggas dont sleep dis battle itll be a Ko,
real cats say Chi's verse cold Jp's not even SoSo

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

i had to go wit lilchio cuz of da flow and the way he stuck out his rhymes. jp u need to wrk on da flow and da word choice, fix those and ur set. still my vote gos to lilchio

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

lilchiofthachi....um no...... work on your wordplay... checking polls

uppin for votes man for tha 50 character thing u gotta have

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

Second guy wins for his verse being readable. You guys need to learn what a punch is though, at least do flow if you can't throw a punch. Wordplay, wit, etc..

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Seriously wack battle.................................

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

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uppin for some more votes i need this bitch closed

honest votes will be returned if u vote on dis battle

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

sorry, but chi takes this hands down.

chi...
you came really simple in this, but your flow was decent and your structure was on point. you had some okay ideas/concepts, but i feel that you didnt capitolize on them properly. some of your verse seemed more like self glorification rather then battling.....be careful with that. work on your punches and personals........vocab wouldnt hurt either.

jp...
sorry bruh, but you came with some played lines. your vocab was bad and your structure was horrible. no offense playboy, but i wasnt really entertained by your piece at all. try working on structure, punches, vocab, multies, flow and personals. drop some pieces in the open mic forum before you jump into battles.....it'll help you to prepare for text battles better. dont let my comments get you down......im only trying to help. hold it down pimp.

oner...

s.v.......c.s.

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

flow chi
rhyming chi
vocab chi
strucutre chi
imagry chi
personal tie
hits chi
opener-closure chi

and hey hit up on my bat in my link iam down one and be honest peace.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Voted For: JpMoNeY06

this is feedback for both YOU=WEAK YOUvs.LexiKon=AWINFORME