stressful days
 

all these days that pass me by
im streesed out searching for that high
but somehow its not to be found
sitting here quite not makeing a sound
i relize that im not at my peak
with these poetic theories that i speak
cant take no more its impossible
it seem like the stress is unstoppable
never saying or doing the right thing
at times all i wanna do is sing
but its allways a put down i recive
tearing me up inside, now i dont belive
now i feel like i'll never know sucess
cant do anything to over power this stress
theres a deep pain inside my chest
only understand this i'm not the best
i must confess...............

i want some feedback on this thanx................

only understand this i'm not the best
i must confess...............

^I think the last lines kinda sum it uo, they express the vulnerability and doubt that was the underlying tone of this poem. Maybe the vocabulary and overall wordings can be improved, add more of a poetic sense to them. But you have potential nonetheless, you know how to put emotion in it and such. Imagery can be worked on as well.

Keep writing :thumbup:

thanx for the feed............uppin for some more.................