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The Addict
i look at it's powdery presence on the table/
one line then another this shits making me unstable/ iv'e gotta kick this habit quick before it gets to me/ the guy who supplyed it it's like the mother fucka knew me/ week afta week of this shit and its makin me stronger/ ive taken a new turn on life - like i can live longer/ rolled up twenty an im ready to snort/ the bitch is knockin on the door im gunna get court/ six lines six seconds and im outta my head/ my girls like Jay u mutha fuckin coke head/ READ THE RULES!! |
this was rather intresting....
i mean for your 1st drop you decided to come to open mic? and you did drop a verse that wasn't really long at all... your flow was aight and topic wasnt to creative but something... all around it wasnt to good but i can see you getting better in due time..... keep trying and focus on making your verse longer and try to get creative while still sticking to the topic good attemp.... |
Just coz he's new to RV don't mean he's new to the game!
It was alright I guess,.... everything rhymed,... u had basic flow, basic vocab and the subject's played. Other then that it was ok! |
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i look at it's powdery presence on the table/ one line then another this shits making me unstable/ ============================================ Dazed at it's powdery substance alluring from the table one line,. one sniff, the chemical shift I stand unstable Also you need to look into it more,... u have got the high when he's taking the drug, but u don't go into the low,.... U need a start a middle and a end for topicals! |
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