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"If I died Tomorrow..."
Iight...Kinda a "newb" at freestylin but i'll let u decide on wut ya think...My 3rd verse ever...
If I died tomorrow, i'd be countin my blessings// From the clothes I had on my back ta tha taste of "Ranch Dressing"// My mom'd be obsessing since I wuz neva able ta pop that question// But through all this shit, maybe i'd still be able to retreave tha lesson// Deep in protestin, I didn't see I was bein a pest-n…// ….now afta it's too late, I realize ma mistake..// It was like I was bein "kicked to tha side…//" like havin someone cry in ya hear, "CHECKMATE"// See, you on realize life's a virtue until it gets put in a "clutch…"// … n "goes down" for tha "TWISTED FATE"// Thas what's been happenin ta me…// but only this time I won't be havin "Gods' good grace"// Now, I'm takin a moment ta say my last goodbyes, "icein tha cake"// End my life inna good way, sparrin my lil brotha of all his pain// cas if I let him follow in my footsteps, i'd go insane// Even when I heard this "news," I felt like I wuz havin a famine-to-tha-brain// So, that's why i'm gonna make the best of my last hours, i've yet ta obtain// Huggin everyone that helped me…// …goin "down" the list as if i'm on some kinda crane// It's a shame I thought life wuz juss bout tha power n the fame// Takin tha world head on by yoself iz pretty lame…// Believe that...n learn from my "mistake"...// cas if I was livin longer, i'd probably still be doin tha same// N look what's happen to me now...I may die tamorrow…// n I sure as hell aint got no-other person, but-me ta blame// Feedback plz... |
this drop was Tight dawg , , , really tight ,,,,, u stayed on topic ,, i liked tha concept ,, , , return da favour http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=43392
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Fa sho...n thanks for tha feed..More plz...
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Tite man stayed consistent all the way through
Peep "MY 8 Bars of Heart" if you have time.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=42766 |
nuthin but heart......nice
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your imagery and wordplay was strong. it flowed great. i know exactly how ya feel, i wrote something similar to urs (which i think u posted on)
keep them beats flowin... |
Thanks peeps...n yea, solja, i'll check urs...
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Uppin..Keep replyin peeps.
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HOTT
shit was hott...had great flow, keep spittin
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fo ur 3rd verse eva that was some tight shti dogg, na'mean that was pretty i'll, fuck u now u got me hungry mmmmm ranch dressing
yo hit my new shit up called "Remaning Unrecognized" http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8513#post398513 |
Thanks peeps..
Lookin fa more.. |
yo this was pretty tight dawg, morbid too, thats my whole steez but for yo check out BRAIN CANDY...droppin soon...peace
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yo kid this was pretty ill..sounds like you're on your way.
Keep doin the do, you know. |
y0o dawg this was a tite ass drop keep em comin ~>
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