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Blood On The Carpet and In The Closet
Blood on the carpet and in the closet This grief and aggression, leads to this lethal profession Insync with his weapon, cause'n many feeble discrections He who speaks the progression, shouldn't seek for expections Cuz when reading this message, he found defeat with projections Now he creeps no objections, and reaps the souls of rejections Those who fold to his methods, will always go, no execptions So!? he own'd the elections, he must atone for acceptance Yea he's pressence is bold, too bad he isn't known for his ethics Our choices infested, suppose to be more hero then epics Why voice our affections, to someone who thinks zero's respected In need of directions, Hell's where i could see the elected His greed is collected, thinks war is how the people's protected Im keep'n it seperate, now its feels as the people are targets Deep in the army, just visualize blood leaking from garments Relieve'n the charges, my opinion, spoken easy but harmless The reason's the market, he gets rich while we get demolished See we are the carpet, step'd on, im just keep'n it honest The systems the closet, in other words, the people in office Shatter'd dreams of the modest, i just kinda think its ironic How's there blood on the carpet and closet, when we have nothing in common? http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2492391 Lost in the music http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210500 Stuck in Shallow Water |
ups fo feed..........i'll rtf.........on feed left behind
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Wow @ your mutli's... wow. You>omb :cool:
And yeah good drop. Shit flowed nice and the lines were quoteable. -respect- |
Congrats.. :thumbup:
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I enjoyed the read. I was really impressed with your vocab multies and internals. This really made it flow smooth. I thought it could have been improved though by using more words to rhyme off.. I thought the story telling was alright, abit abstract but i loved the ending - nice and abrupt makes you stop and think. Props.
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Thanx for the feed and thanx fo the nomination continue to feed if you will
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Up'n for more feed.................this is a good piece
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try drop some multi's like this homey
he wore bling grave this godly thing brave as the king gave Hercules twelve labors to perform but wasn't told of the hell and major storms await his journey |
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^^^nigga please multie mayn i was really feeling your flow i thought you lived up to your name on this one that shit was sick for real. emotion was there i can't really fault you on anything in this piece so keep it up. ~peace~ |
Imppressive multies, the whole thing flowed nicely and the story was fluid. I enjoyed the read, however.
I feel you could expand in emotion and description. Overall nice drop, it's nice to see some sencere OM's being dropped lately. Keep it up man. Peace. Hit up something in my sig, if you catch a moments time. ;) |
thanx for the feed my next couple will be betta
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look my clout stands but I'm out of plans// need to discuss ways and means so C.E.O.'S can thrust trays of green// my way, try maintain in reason but hell too much rain this season plus my brain commit treason// on microphones, problems arise daily leave me surprise and staly // with no answers and that throw cancers// in my game
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are you done? :huh:
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ups for feed..............
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