Help!!!!!!!!!
 

it was 11:00 at night and i was gettin ready to go to bed
but sumthin was wrong thoughts were running through my head
i want to sleep not knowing what the next day would bring
my friend was in a gang and now there was a new king
my mom came in my room around 1:30am that night
not knowing but my head feeling was really was right
she said he's gone and i broke into tears
knowing the impossible had became my fears
i was a wreck but i knew i had to go to school the next day
they played he's favorite song and sent me on my way
i was a slient as a mouse, the 1st day i didn't have detention
itz a amazing how sumthin like this could get my attention
now i have alot of things on my mind
weres the gang, should i kill my own kind?
Does two wronges really make it right?
what would hav happined if i would hav been there that night?
now i'm all depressed with no answers for my questions
what do u think, any suggestions?

cool verse real nice you have potential as a poet good piece real emotional i think you should not be in a gang and dont worry what they do gangs are corny but i like to start beef with them :laugh:

omg K... i liked it... heyy call me sum time when u get the chance well i g2g bye

empire ur a fruit,
soundlike a rap verse, but it was good verse.