Conversion/./vs/./RedEye
 

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Name Redeye cuz u think u smoke herbs but u just pretendin
Look at ya lines i see ur avy's arms not the only thing extended
You should get ya structure in shape take it to a health spa
My punches bring heat and hate to ya chest like hell's bra
Strangle you wit ya neck tie ta make you a killer professional
Ya verse is holy with enough whack lines ta fill a confessional
Lines 7 and 8 said u were great, but only at bein the head of disgrace
Take it fed in ya face, cuz ya verse was simply red and made waste
I'm settin tha pace, tha beatin's so quick u aint even let in the race
Find a bed in tha lake.....i'm puttin you ta rest so you'll never awake

Im Cuttin Conversion Wit Incisions/thats My Mission/call Me Dr. Redeye/ Fly In The Sky Like A Jedi/verbal Assult Feel The Pain/redeye Come Down On Your Ass Like The Rain/you Cant Handle Me/redeye From The Bsc/basic Smugglin Criminals/takin Folls Like You Out Weak Individuals/

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Umm..

Conversion takes this for sure... better flow, punches, structure etc..
Redeye had some nice vocab.. altho set out in a real wack way... sort the structure out for sure.. visit W.E.C....
It turned out like 2 bars vs 5 in the end..

Vote - Conversion

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Here's how I see it.

Flow=Con, his flow had a much better structure which made it easier to read. Red, you need to work on your flow, it was hard to read which took away from your verse.

Punches=Con, he had more punches that hit harder. Red, you need to work on punching, you didn't really come with any punches you mostly talked about yourself which isn't what your supposed to do in a battle.

Personals=Con, once again, he had more personals that were better. Red, you didn't really come with any personals either, this is another area that you should work on, personals can win you battles.

Vocab=Con, he had a lot more vocab in his verse than Red, it opened up his drop so that he could have made it even better than it was. Red, you came with pretty basic vocab, I realized this cause it's something I need to work on also, more vocab would help you open up the options while dropping a piece.

Over all=Con, you came pretty good on this drop, it was a good read and had some good stuff in there. If you have anything to work on it's probably getting some metas or some more word play.
Red, you need to work on your punches, personals, vocab, but for now you should focus on your flow. It really takes away from the read when everything all bunched up like that. If you work on those things it will really improve your drops.

Vote=Conversion

Please vote on my battle, thanks, here's the link.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108625