Hells Fire vs. Drama Queen vs. Anxiety
 

Checkity check...awww man, this is gonna be d-o-p-e...

DQ

Lets do this... Good Luck Drama Queen and Hell's Fire.

checkin in this shit gonna be dope, last time i was in this triple threat thing everyone dropped so dope and this is for the hole thing so i better get writtin haha

Yeah, you only have like 2 weeks.

End of the Road
 

Hospital, kid turned man, man turned senior
get-visual, wit turned mad, mad turned leaner
saw my days glitter like sands face and this rat run its last race
depression shitter, emotional mace, and this kat became last bass
like blood became thinner, epidermal wrinkler, head went balder
like hood became inner, stuggle no winner, feds went else-where
This was the end of the road though it curved and swirved
many lost their lives to my action though verbed and word
Webster lost in past tense my scripture as old as hollywood prints
Blester then most to have a family measure and childhood friends
I staired into sons focal point watched water persperate the soil
i flaired at sons emotional joint told not to wan, vibrate or boil
no falt my turn on demise, no flawnt i lived my life
no halt no turn for cries, no dawnt it happened all life
Flashbacks, kid-in-arms, watchin embryo form on tube
classacts, ma-ma-charms, learnin video games on tube
growin so fast realising i cant keep up to my kids n mass
movin so fast realising i cant weep up seen wits n class
my sports,graduation, college dorm rooms vast
their sports, graduation, college dorm rooms vast
crying at funeral site where my buddies race finished early
prying at mineral site where my bodies chase developed slowly
i was losing my battle with life, but having fun with the strife
had a tragedy but kept with life, having run my length of life
i seen horizon set too many times, and the moon glow like evershine
i seen sore eyes on too many times, and the goon turn into nice mind
i walked so many paces that prints left unparallel
i walked so many steps that stints didnt held well
seen so many faces, so many ethinicities, so many country ties
so many country fights, so many democracies, so many illitracies
so many forest, so many ocean, so many mountians, so many hills
so many war rest, so many notion, so many ounces, so many pills
too many pages, too many books, too many bullets, too many graved
too many homage, too many looks, too many mullets, too many saved
History books getting longer, knowledge getting oh so broader
seriods makin teens stronger, voyages to foreign mexico boarder
but as i sat there in the bed a light hit my face first oh so small
tho my heart began a tear the night grace, i began float then fall
respirator in me i began to see it in slow motion as all seen failed
perpirator on me i began to see it in slow motion as god prevailed
i left the room in biology but not meta physically n with one word left the world forever with my same old melody...


here it is its kinda long hope yall like it good luck to eveyone

Extension Issued:

Due to complications verses are due March 6, 2005, by 11:00 PM EST.

px

shitty well keep mine up there

no extension needed.

This is my last topical... And that is what it's going
to be about... So enjoy my last one, and read it all...

Looking back, i cant believe this is how far i got...
When i started i was mocked, and teased when i dropped...
I was a cat who couldnt battle, but just wouldnt quit...
So i went around looking for a different genre to spit...
Then i came across topicals, and I thought I'd try em out...
I knew the basics, but i wanted to try a different route...
And at first, people didnt seem to understand my style...
It was wild, but i absorbed it in, sat back and smiled...
But inside, I didnt know how they thought i was so bad...
Back when topicals were rated on structure and vocab...
So i was torn, i felt i shouldnt stray from the norm...
But i did, and through me a whole new style was born...
It was basic, a child could read it, vocab was bare...
But tells a story so perfect that you thought you were there...
Imagery so amazing that you'd smell what I smell...
Emotion so fucking mindblowing that you felt what I felt...
But i was way too cocky, so to be perfectly honest...
It was a reality check when i lost to Nostradamus...
So flow intelligent told me about this league that he ran...
And i needed to elivate, so i gave it a chance...
Then i met final, a topical cat, and wanted to help him win...
But truthfully, he helped me at least as much as i helped him...
And in the league, i started battling all kinds of cats...
Within a month, i was already in the championship match...
Then i signed up for this tourney, the last thing left...
With only one goal in mind, to be considered the best...
So with this last one, ive come to show how i've grown...
Cause after this, thats it, this was the end of the road...

Damn This Is A Tight Battle Hellfire I Think Won This Here His Verse Meant So Much Its Ridicules He Gave So Much In So Little Words I Feel He Just Had More Raw Emotion And Better Imagery His Shit Was Real Deep Anxiety And Drama You Know Your My Boo You Had A Good Drop But Hellfire Had A Amazing One While Yall Won In Flow He Won In All Other Areas He Dropped Fucking Dope I Gotta Go Wit Hellfire For Better Emotion Imagery And Just A Better Drop Damn I Never Thought Id Vote Aganist Anixety In A Topical Kid Is Fucking Dope But Hellfire Got You This Time Sun
Vote-hellfire

Vote disqualified due to inadeqaute feedback. Please critique all three verses, not just the one you feel was the best. px----Architect

Cali is my dog and all but the vote should be disqualified for not touching on my verse or drama queens verse in the slightest... Address every verse in the vote homie.

Agreed. Vote DQed, nice to see you back anxiety, and you did need an extension, you would have been late 35 minutes. :) px

This was a tight topical battle from everyone of us...wanna give props to Hells Fire and anxiety so people, read and vote :)

DQ

Hells Fire - 3rd Place (imo) - 8/10
Check it, this was a very interesting drop....you came with a very long drop to address the subject, but it led to an irratic unproportionate structure..i could see no reason for your bad structure such as to convey confusion or irrationality so it just came across to me as bad writing..and in topicals I regard the "english" of the drop highly...your poor structure mad the flow choppy and it highlighted alot of other things in your drop, such as poor spelling - it dont take much to spell check a drop man..you could have easily overcome your poor structure with PARAGRAPHS lol.......I loved the way you tried to approach the topic..it showed a real flair for what you were doing..but i didnt like your use of vocab..in my book either learn how to use it responsibly like DQ where it is not over-done but ur still showing off some intellect or come simplistic like anxiety and show some originality...i found your use of vocab too much- i understood it but to me it just confused some of your ideas and spoilt what could have been some good metaphors and similies by making them too complicated or in many instances stooping them from making sense....your topic coverage was on point and a high proportion of your lines added to your story and developed the plot...with a lot fo your lines you made some nice images and conveyed a lot of emotion but at times what you created didnt fit with the topic and had no relevance...which even if they are dope lines they must be relevant to the topic...I think you would have easily taken this final with a more structured, simplistic and concise drop as a lot of your ideas far excelled those of the other 2 but they got confused in mess i.m.o...you have a lot of talent man...:thumbup: no h8 (sorry if it sounded harsh just pissed me off you fucked this up lol)

Anxiety - 2nd Place (imo) -9/10
Yo,one thing i dint like about this topical is the arogance that came through from it, despite your statemnts about humbling when loosing to nostradamus it just sounded cocky and over-confident all the way through and this was one of the emotions i hated in your piece...You structure was on point and it really worked well to help emhasise words in your lines..your vocab was so simple its silly but the simplicity of it made the drop so much better, and accessible to anyone reading it....flow was on point, although it would have bee hard to mess up the flow of the story using such monosyllable words..your topic coverage was dope...you came from a very original although annoying angle about your personal rise to the "top" in the topical game..and you stayed on topic constantly, with every line relevant to the subject...your drop if anything was filled with statements and you had next to few metaphors and similies which led to your drop lacking a lot of emotion and having almost no imagery..making it kind of boring and hard to relate to..all-in-all a solid topical but not enough to win this dope ass battle :thumbup: no h8

Drama Queen - Winner (i.m.o) - 9.5/10
I was very very very very (lol) surprised at first glance to see the length of your drop so short especially as you dropped after Hells Fire, so I almost immediately had doomed you to loss....but your drop showed a lot of elements that out-shone the rest and led to a solid dope topical drop which was virtually flawless...firstly you didnt come with the glaringly obvious as the other 2 in the sense that you looked to the future of the "end of the road" so you weren't actually there yet, whereas the other two where there, and this showed from the beginning you were thinking hard about the content of the topical...your structure was flawless...it was nice how it was seperated into paragraphs which were set out as almost stanzas or verses which gave a solid topical a poetic vibe which I was feeling being a poet myself...the vocabulary you used was well-placed,relevant and fitted in thee context of your sentences..you conjured a lot of dope ass imagery in this drop with effective use of metaphors and similies and this in turn created and conveyed a lot of emotions and feelings...in terms of topic coverage you stayed on topic 99% of the time..1/2 lines were off and really only outstood due to the shortness of your drop compared to the others..but they took nothing away from your overall drop...your drop was unique in that it didnt tell a conventional tale as did the others but instead told the story of your feelings and predicted them and that was hella dope yo...you came strong in this and outshone the favourite ever so slightly to take this..:thumbup: no h8

VOTE - DRAMA QUEEN

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