tried some deeper shit, no title..
 

The days of 1 on 1 fighting seem to me to be abolished..
You dont face 1 man, just 10men gangs, crews and posse's..
Shit had gone too far, people lose a fight,but that aint accepted..
Guns blasting from car windows...i shouldnt have to expect it..
Dealers approach me, sayin they legit and straight, tyna sell me weed
Have to accept it...otherwise the loss of a life will be guaranteed..
People gonna start shit when in numbers, courage is what they lack..
You dont get a punch in the face...they put a bullet in you back..
Saw my own friends shot dead....rushed away in an ambulance..
How can you call this shit a life...when its merely an existance..

drop some feed please.. i will rtf if wanted.

uppinnnnnnnnnnn......

I think its okay, it had a good story or whatver but it'll be better if it was longer and had a little more vocab...but other than that...good piece.

~1~

uppin..............

Choppy flow and vocab, but the emotion was pretty good. Keep it up. Peace.

ite thanks.................. UPPPPIIINNNNNNNN......

uppin .

uppin...............

Kinda short. You shouldve made this wayy longer, and it wouldve helped out your sensory detail and cancelled out the poor rhyming. But not all the rhyming words were bad, just some of em. This was just an ok piece. I think you should finish it, and make it into a complete song. Nothing special, just ight for me.

uppin