My Enemy’s Diary
its unknowingly Guile, black.. I read it once, a while back.
thinking I’d read a book packed with carefully compiled facts instead it defiled my unblemished image with cruel lies saying that through time I only existed to do crimes and construe signs that deceive just to bring people to me but if you looked at me there would be no evil to see my enemy tried to be equal to me, succeeding in the eyes of those who believe him, whom hes been deceiving he’s Jesus; a heathen, and me?.. some know me as Satan but I’m really God.. Jesus isn’t holy and faking who’s mans faith in?. the actual devil; prince of darkness you think he died for you? then you don’t know where his heart is especially since hes heartless & demanded fear he didn’t come down to save.. he simply landed here where he was left stranded years ago.. after I kicked him out of heaven, which I do when angels of mine pick sin but let me rewind, listen.. one day I saw him writing Hey Jesus, is this what you did those times you been hiding? yes Lord Lucifer, I write daily in my journal its nothing serious. why does this sound rehearsed though? nevermind, I need to first know why this urge to write stuff? don’t lie schmuck, remember I know everything. alright!! FUCK!! its called the Bible, I sent a few copies to earth today in it.. your me and I’m you, didn’t mean to hurt you. gay! I don’t have a word to say except for why’d you do this? it was just a matter of time, you knew it.. I’m your Judas that book, go through it. you’ll know exactly what I mean then this is obsene man!, its all been a part of a scheme then? yea we’re even, but what have I ever done to you? NOTHING! that’s just it. you dont praise me when I do things none would do like lead the choir & play the drums too. you get me? only I receive praises, you know that.. ehhhh forget thee your gonna regret you ever met me. don’t start with threats you could fix it all if you just stopped playing hard to get maybe I should be sorry, are you yet?. not even close I‘m sending you to Hell to roast. you mean I’m being toast? yea, you‘ll be needing hope.. In plain words.. eternal flames? worst! your going to earth to suffer a great deal of pain first whatever you say herb. I’ll really make them think I’m you now heal the sick, make disciples.. all the things I can do, wow stop it Jesus! your too proud. & this could be a blessing man if you go down there and repent I’ll give you a second chance theres no repenting plan, I’m deceiving humanity play mind tricks on them till their reaching insanity completing my fantasy.. as I make them say my name for everything, “JESUS JESUS” while in their brains I reign he obviously would remain the same.. so I stopped him dropped him off on earth where he’d masterfully plot sin but he did not win, I’m still God, & those who believed his lies need to see its lies & search for the truth to get redeemed with time stop being blind, if you have a dire need to inquire me know that the Bible’s not my word.. just my enemy’s diary |
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CONCEPT IS GENIUS, IT'S CREATIVE & UNIQUE...I DON'T KNOW WHY CATS IS SLEEPIN ON THIS THREAD. STORY LINE STAYED ON TRACK THE WHOLE TIME...
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HOT, NICE TRANSITION INTO THE NEXT LINE.... THERE WAS A COUPLE CORNY LINES THROWN IN WHERE ITS CLEAR YOU WAS LOOKING FOR ANOTHER MULTI TO THROW IN SUCH AS... Quote:
BUT THEN AGAIN ITS EXCEPTABLE WHEN YOUR TACKLING A CHALLENGING SUBJECT & THE FLOW WAS AS LONG AS IT WAS, SO THERES GONNA BE A COUPLE THROWAWAY LINES ADDED IN TO SPACE THE VERSE OUT... DOPE SHIT THOUGH. |
nice man .
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always love ur shit. that piece was original and creative as fuck. u had nice imagrey. some internal. and multies, flow was pretty nice. over all that was a kick ass piece, cant wait for ur next one.
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This was decent. I like the creativity behind this verse, it was very well thoughtful. You seem to be forcing, here and there, in your rhymes. The imaginary was good, very well portrait. The emotion I could feel between the 2 characters in your verse. The Transition though was kinda, iffy, but it was cool. The vocabulary was good. This was a very wel interesting piece, the only thing that caught my attention was your creativity/ concept and the way you apporached the Topic, very Nice.
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