Sonnet 1
 

For english class... im actualy posting this here so i can retrieve it at school tomorrow and print it because my printer was broken... but ill take some feedback too...

Sonnet 1

A I first studied this single blank sheet of paper
B Realizing that anger could take only my speech from me
A But I know I could never attempt to deny this later
B You hold in your hands, written evidence of what I try to be

C I have been working to always be kind, and to be patient with you
D I also have erased any record of wrongs, and of fallacies
C Simply because love does not delight in evil, it rejoices with truth
D Boasting is understandable, from someone as proud as me

E I have learned that love is a two way road
F and you get what you give, until love is found
E So I am giving it my all, and I will try not to fold
F Hopefully it is true, what goes around, comes around

G So I keep note of my emotions with no shame to my image
G Your name is forever in my heart, and my heart is my lyrics

Hopefully most of you know about sonnets and their structure...
This is more of a sonnet that was written from an inner-self type of creativity... so it wont be fully comprehended by most... thanks for the peep..

lol interestin way to print a piece....

i usually use a disk...but seriously i neva knew excatly what a sonnet was...

is this in iambic pantameter? i neva understood that...

had several teachers try an tell me but i neva got it lol...so if it is mad props to u...

n e ways... i really loved this piece...flow was excellent an i just loved that first stanza...shit was illness...deep piece

dude,
yeah nice work I guess on it.
But English sonnets have 10 syllable lines and some range of in to 12.
You were hovering between like 11 and 16 or 17 sometimes per line.

You may not have to stick to that one for your teach but I'm just lettin you know dude.

Other than that it was alright. kudos to the good.
Since the overall product is fair I'll point out just a couple things that I wasn't too fond of but don't think these are too overbearing for the poem, it's still strong.

l. 7 -- "simply" - superfluous. It actually takes away from the end of the line and it's to extra syallables that drag it on.

and I would have thrown punctuation in there since the sonnet is heavily based on structure.
you closed well. Good luck with the mark .
Peace