**Concept piece**Track : Life Of Miquel
 

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chorus X 2
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Livin his life NO worries this kid posesses//
pleases his shorty everynight wit a dozen roses//
browses his block for the wrongdoing hes about to unlock//
doesnt realize the troubles he holds be in his glock//
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Since the birth from his mothers womb hes been living in the projects//
never commits any crimes but always is proclaimed as a suspect//
Since 8 years old miquel has been in neglect and tries to stay outta dangers//
his mother said be a good boy never disrespect others//
miguel pleased his moms by being perfect unlike his 2 brothers//
disliked miquel for outshining the 2 infront of there mother//
Another year has gone by and the kid has just turned nine//
his birthday party was a glorious event now he was top of the shrine//
from a fine dine meal to G.I joe dolls by the end of the night miquel got a important phone call/
when he hung up miquel happiness plumited down to a decline//
his friend said what is it prob/
miquel weeps and says the cops found my dad dead wit 2 shots to his head//
tried to rob him and steal his car and his money which he called bread//
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chorus x 2
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puttin the horrid past behind begins a fresh start in high school//
star on the verge of a baseball scholarship and a girl bright like a jewel//
classy devine design personality is cool and people that disliked her were pathetic fools//
school consists of cruel people and hatred around miquel begins//
beef between friends hears both stories and chosses 1 side by days ends//
confused brain spinning more then a massive twister a year past and jus blew a blank//
Miquel heart sank once his girl moved away sky's to him seemed grey//
he knows he broke her virginity and that she'll remember forever//
and he knows he will never encounter a pussy that is sweeter//
Senior year now weeks away from the ultimate goal graduation//
slight desperation he be in now stress about baseball and all this discrimination//
glimpse of his past finally caught up wit him and reved up a fury of frustration//
had enough of this life so what did he do//
so he took his he thought of it as a vacation to see his long lost father//


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