Varentao vs. ThugzDoCry
 

Round 1

10 Line Min.
20 Line Max.
Due: Tuesday, September 2nd.


Topic: An Honest Mistake

Well i guess i'm checking in. Just in case that minimum letter rule is in. I'll keep on typing and just say that i am a mod, so take it easy thugz...The End and co. are waiting with their brollys and handbags if i'm made to look a fool and therefore shame the name of mod-ism....

....(mercy)...

A weathered man,
Lying motionless,
Gently weeping,
Drowning Slowly,
Deep within...

With fiery cold will,
Twisted with many sides.
To weave sheltering webs,
Playing on the cries.
Dwelling in dark delight
Using truth as a whore.
All to comprehend,
This bitter-sweet war..

Amid dense deception,
That haunts this life...

...is an honest mistake,
Lying motionless,
Gently weeping,
Drowning slowly,
Deep within..

In..............Drop asap........had work to do, just saw this.....
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..::An Honest Mistake::..

Livin By Statements Like....
Comin To This World On U'r Own Thats How U Leave It....
Wakin Up Wet, Fear Of Sleap...Nightmares...Disturbin There Minds....
Look Futher, And Realize, People Cant Be Judged.. By The Hard Outside...
Younsters, Expressin ThemSelfes,..In Criminal Ways....
Theres More Than That, Is Just Another Way Of Tryin To Hide....
Walkin Around Like Teenage Zombies....Criminal Minded.....
Cant Look At Life Normally,..Cuz Of The Pain They Are Real Life Blinded....
Like A Twig, Life Is Leanin On Them..They Ar Close To Break.....
Are They Really The One To Blame?..Or Is It Just An Honest Mistake...
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* I Tryed To Center It, Didnt Work....I Didnt Adjust My Piece

im goin with varentao cause his rhymed and even though thugz was longer i didnt feel it as much. make longerlines varentao.

Er, okay, so who voted? Cos it seems to say i have ("You have already voted on this poll"). But i didn't. So i presume some kind of error?!..

Apparently 2hot2handle voted like the n00b that he is. It doesn't really matter as after the judges vote I edit the polls anyway.

Varentao Very Easily Took This In My Opinion. .
His Poem Was Breath Taking, It Really Made Me Think.
Thugzdocry's Poem Almost Seemed Rushed And Non Thought Out..
But You Could Tell That Varanteo Put Heart Into That Verse..
And Therefore Easilt Taking This. Good Luck In the Following Rounds.

Vote Varentao

^ Sureal can't log in, so I posted it for him.

^I agree.
V, I was simply astounded by your verse. The symbolism and just the pure beauty of each line, you are a real poet, excellent piece, which i feel, in no way could have been outdone.
ThugzDOCry..You had an OK effort I suppose, But Like what's been said, Varentao's seemed so passionate, with a much more heart rendering concept, just brilliantly written and amazingly felt.
Excellent Job Varentao..
May you continue producing beauty and progressing in this tourny.

VOTE: VARENTAO