Awakened~Re-Awakened
 

You can hear your pulse punding inside your head
Ya eyes are watering, sockets black outline, dead
Ya body is nothing then a ice cold cadaver ready
Ya mind preserved in...ya thoughts become steady
The college class comes forward to disect ya body
No..its not right..stop..it's chritsmas..you see holly
It's back to the time before you were slaugtherd
All you can see in your eyes is red..brain faultered?
This was the night your family was taken from you
You can see the killers starting to that them..in 2's
You scream..but your moans drowned out by pain
Your back in the class..but your thoughts..insane
An insertion through the scalp as your skin is down
The students wince..some have a scorn..or a frown
BOOM..you move your hands do the doctor cutting
Pull the skin back to your face and stick it in place
The doctor yells..disgrace..leave..now...post haste
You run from the room into the street with fright
Look left...right...in front of you glowing bright lights
It's over your dead..another awaking will occur tonight

Just a little something that I came up with, I was bored, see if you like it. All kinds of feedback are welcome.

Uppin for some feedback from your guys.

Alright, I think that this is a fairly good Open Mic yet no one wants to look at it, come on now. Please check this out.

Uppin For Feedback.

this was decent, not great, I've seen better on here... But I can tell you put something into, though it was vocab lol... but no worries there...

your flow got fucked up a few times, the .. thing don't help lol...
some of the positives were a few good multi's, work on that, u definately need more... and i think i spotted a meta or two...

I did have goot meta's and I thought the flow was really good the whole way through, none the less thanks for the feedback.

Uppin for some more feedback.