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*Phantom* 02-04-05 05:45 PM

Love/Confusion/Forgiveness
 
Love

What is this im feeling, is it love or more
Im not sure if im ready, to walk through that door
Somethings not right, Im starting not to care
This is messed up, it aint fair
I do love her but im not sure if she feels the same
I think she hates me, and im startin to feel the same
I give up, I don't wana play this game
I guess love is both a gift and a curse
I still cant believe she broke up with me first
Is there still a chance for me and you
I hope so, I really do love you

Confusion

Im confused, I thought we broke up a while ago
On the same day of our date, when you were a no show
But that was no excuse for me to do what i did
I am not sure I wanted our relationship to end
I wana be more, I don't wana be your friend
I know its over, forward youve moved
But Im stuck in the past, Im confused

Forgiveness

Baby, I wana say Im sorry for everything
You know its true, For you I'll do anything
I tried seeing other people, It's not for me
Im for real, your the only person for me
It's like a piece of me is gone, no where to be found
Since you left me my life has gone no where but down
I love you, i miss you, I need you
Please allow me to make it up to you
Im gonna get on the floor and plead
Please, forgive me

*Phantom* 02-04-05 06:58 PM

upping for positive feedback...............

*Phantom* 02-05-05 01:04 PM

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*Phantom* 02-05-05 01:57 PM

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*Phantom* 02-07-05 05:08 PM

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*Phantom* 02-08-05 04:55 PM

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*Phantom* 02-11-05 04:50 PM

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*Phantom* 02-12-05 11:43 AM

uppin//////////////////////

MC IgGY 02-12-05 12:45 PM

some great writing, all of us can relate too
flowed well, just improve ur vocab a lil bit

*Phantom* 02-13-05 12:49 PM

^^^thanks.uppin

mizz fyre 02-13-05 02:04 PM

i think it was pretty good how you divided it into paragraphs and used a different feeling for each.....each feeling was described quite well would have been great if you had come more complex with the vocab that would be somethin to work on overall though....7/10

*Phantom* 02-14-05 02:28 PM

thanks. uppin/////////////

*Phantom* 02-15-05 05:31 PM

uppin///////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

*Phantom* 02-17-05 04:18 PM

uppin............................................. .

Da_Throwdest 02-18-05 05:16 PM

it'z sum good shit u wrote i felt it cuz like mc iggy say we've all went thru it keep up the good work & i like the overall quality fo sho


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