Lies
 

Baby You Lied To Me
You Said You Loved Me
It Was A Lie

You Said You'd Give Me
The Moon And The Stars
It Was A Lie

You Said You Would Always
Be There For Me
It Was A Lie

You Said You Would Never
Leave Me
It Was A Lie

You Left Me When I Needed
You The Most
You Left Me Cryin All By Myself
Baby You Lied To Me

it wasn't bad. it kinda dragged, cuz u were basicly saying the same thing, just in different words. it was kinda simple, but this didn't really need to be complex, the only thing is u need to give the reader a lil more of urself in a piece like this cuz its basicly just ur emotion speaking for itself. put a lil more of urself in it and u can have something here. it was still pretty good though, don't make all ur pieces this simple though, but the simplicity did work here.

return the favor on into eternity please

a very simple poem.

with poems as simple as this there is never much to say about them.
for everything can be defined as simple.
its a piece without any detail that can be taken and expanded on
draw a bigger picture
with more emotion
structure, vocab, flow
meaning

~Tera~
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