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fluidmoon 08-31-04 08:53 PM

when positive atoms collide......
 
negativity escapes and drapes to multiply....
sewing seeds that don't belong,two wrongs that cant right.....
as much as they try,the sky can't touch night,just dualistic sights....
seeking solace in coexistence,forced to bear eachothers burdens.....
plighting forth down the fork in the road,choosing to plot further implode...
the reality is we're torn, seams worn, nature naturally knows this code....
loving not condoning different worlds, but expecting them to nourish woes..
flourish foes, live with living beings young and old, soaking in breathing...
needing everything to exist,for without one another we would extinguish "free"



~just a few thoughts in my head~
~about negativity and positivity~

TURBAN 08-31-04 08:59 PM

feelin that, it had a nice structure to it , and i felt the emotion in it, nice drop check some of my stuff *jus scroll down , but keep droppin and i'll keep checkin peace out

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BZ No Mercy 08-31-04 11:39 PM

emotion in it was nice...Keep it up cuz....good drop.

Triple_N 09-01-04 12:07 AM

Good emotion throughout I could really feel your words, structure was kinda misleading cuz it flowed well, good drop, look forward to more from you.

fluidmoon 09-05-04 02:15 PM

thanks peeps................................uppin

G_$peed 09-05-04 03:54 PM

nice poem... i liked it very much...

ill bing aka U.G 09-05-04 07:20 PM

i felt it it was tight it was lyrical check my shit to its not so lyrcial but im working on it but nice drop

Cocaine 09-05-04 07:30 PM

tight shit fluid, i liked the flow, keep it up gurl

fluidmoon 09-08-04 06:30 PM

uppin one last time.....................for feed

INFALLIBLE 09-09-04 12:00 AM

A yo ma' that shit had hella feelin behind it even tho it was
"free"~just a few thoughts in my head~
~about negativity and positivity~
still liked the shit, nice drop keep doin ya thing, hope ta see some mo o this kinda work frum ya' aight -1-

Know-Gimix 09-09-04 12:49 AM

this was cool, short and it said alot-- flowed well- i liked it... stay up.1

fluidmoon 09-11-04 01:43 PM

thanx fam, uppin..................................1

Ill-Grammatix 09-11-04 05:24 PM

NO DOUBT! tight as always Fluid... keep doing ya thang on the poetry tip!

[.:D:.] 09-12-04 02:34 PM

i agree...i did like this...very lyrical..seemed like you are really into this..good job...M.K stay up


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