Drowning in Thought
Drowning in Thought I always thought I had it rough, that good times were just a bluff Never quite filled with happiness, who knew life would be so tough Enough! Story of my life is missing pages, sometimes I just don’t make it Invisible cages, and violent rages, summed up my life in stages Different phases, but I’m lucky when you look at the big picture People dying around the world, while I’m writing in Sacred Scriptures Opinions differ, I should be grateful for our troops fighting overseas Military personnel, achieving victories ensuring freedom for centuries Even smaller things in life, that mostly tend to pass unnoticed The helpless and the homeless, cause me to lose my focus People living on the street, begging for bread, using benches for beds When I’m close-minded wishing I was dead, but I got a roof over my head My dreaded altercations, usually amount to nothing in the long run Imbedded complications refuse to be seen coming without welcome But eventually they evaporate, incinerate as time ticks on and on Negotiate with right and wrong, I drop verses terrorists drop bombs Now I can’t help but to ponder, the world’s undeniable struggles Left with the rash realization, about the serious problems of others My head is racing with ideas, thinking of how can I compare All of my simplistic shit, with the devastating troubles of theirs Wars, poverty, loss of lives, corrupt governments and their lies I try to fathom being their shoes, I probably wouldn’t survive So many negative thoughts in my mind, yet I feel so alone Overwhelming, someone help me, depressed from issues I can’t control I feel so much sympathy for those, who have it so much worse than me Puts everything in perspective, helped me find me true identity Rivers on my cheeks, waterfalls off my chin, I thank God I’m me Even my thoughts are crying steadily, Drowning me in harsh reality |
wow, deep poem, i felt this foreal, nice imagery in your words as well, keep drooppin dope pieces...........1
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Thanks a lot...jus came over from RB...hope to be active on RV from now on
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lmfao nice shit dawg...but quit fuckin wit me on aim....i'm confooooosed an its to early
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thanks for the replys i guess...not really any good feedback..how are people sposed ti improve when you dodn't critique their verses
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Very nice drop. This is probably my favorout poetry peice on this site in a while. I think theres a lot to learn from peoples struggles and you outlined it nicely with well written rhymes and flow.
Good job and I look forward to reading more of your peices. |
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you are takin up ur old form as you did on rb,by froppin great pieces,very emotional,the imagery is there all the way,i like how ya dropped it down into details...and the setting of the poem was also nice very good jamison i mean lyric lol....peace |
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