yo dawgs I got a real fucked problem
 

yo I lost two battles
so I'ma give you my last battleshit.
please tell me what's wrong with that.

this time I'm gettin' mad/
that shit will be more phat/
than the wack-shit last time so check that/
I had a fucked up day/
got played and stressed by gays/
like you suckin' dicks which just won't spew/
some bitches knocked me down/
and even want to drown/
me and my family you scumsuckin' patsy/
you sucker now get pasted/
it was too much time I wasted/
first I kill your mother/
next jerk will be your brother/
and your the followin'/
you should stop dicksuckin'/
your faggy homo crew/
which's gettin' drunk of brew/
I'll beat the shit out you all/
smack your heads against the Berlin-wall/
you created new up on my head/
how this bitch after our last battle said/
Lyric you're lookin' like a slag/
you stupid fuckin' fag/
I slize you from the dick up to the head/
cause you're dumb and wack/
but now I squash that shit/
anyway you're not able to beat it/
wait at last I have to get a little homophobic/
cause faggits like you got a small or no dick/
Lyricalassassin bitches like you are stressin'/
go home 'n' fuck your dad/
until his anus's red/
but he'll beat your ass too/
no matter what you do/
you liked it so you called him back when your redeye was okay/
you are just a stupid gay.

I really don't know.

was that a battle verse? cause if it was you got a couple a problems. 2 general problems......1) make ya barz longer
2)try usin more wordplay....ok,now if that was a battle verse then you lack punches. in fact, it sounds like its averse for a song or somethin. you need to just attack him. dont tell him how your day is goin or stuff like that, just attack him

^^ Good advice

ok nuff said unfadable

ive got that problem ive lost 3 won 0 n i dont know how to up my game its weird everytime i think im gettin better i end up losing again peep my battle in the RBBL vs. Dark HisTORY n ive got one in frontlines vs. The Ghost n get back to me thanks much appriciated

Elevate

how though what is there i could elavate on?

you need to work on ya punches and imagry

but this might sound stupid but what is a good punch can you give an example?

doesn't exist you actually have to think about rhyming and put in effort.....a punch is a creative diss, many times with a double meaning....the kind of shit that makes a crowd say ooooh


like you couldnt spit an ill verse if you coughed it.....

you know...that's some basic shit but like that

U couldn't spit Clean if you was usin Listerine

Ok Dat Line is played out like a mufucka but it's actually better than any line u posted in dat verse up there
Try bein more creative with punchlines!!!!
Dont do no simple shit like

I slize you from the dick up to the head/
cause you're dumb and wack/
but now I squash that shit/
anyway you're not able to beat it/

I mean wat da fuck iz dat??!!!!
in those 4 LITTLE lines you used 4 LITTLE WORDZ and didn't even RHYME!!!
head,wack,shit,and beat it

atleast use werdz dat a 1st grader isn't able to use

Try usin multies 2
becuz when you use multies it makes your verse look more attractive and it also improves your FLOW!!


aight man
~`UnO`~

just let it flow bruther the feel wil cum 2 u.
relax and make it easy.
u'll do it 4get about it, yo raps r gud just takes time.

bad advice, i think that cat is mad at life. matter of fact "bitch slapped him twice" just for actin like his ass is tight.

why the fuck you grab the mic?

angry white guys a bi with his arms tied to the bed side ready to to take a back door ride, hes wack and doesnt know it, hes plain gross, and isnt affraid to show it, cuz he does everyday, and im gettin tired of it ud lose everything, ryhmes or job, hed get fired from it, so thatll be enuff from a lyric bitin cock suckin nusence we dont need to hear any more a'yur frutiness, ur lossin it if u think your cool, u can drool all u want, but im still takin you to skool,
ur ryhmes like gruel i know, soft gushy wit no flow, he wrote a 2 bar ryhme, thought about, 5 minutes later added a new line, in a new post, he boasts that he better than anyone here at RB he gunna keep fuckin around catch a loss and be sorry he ever fucked with Rb.com or me FUCK YOU ANGRYWHITEGUY