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Given Light Vs. MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
This Is The First Round So Records Will Not Be at stake.
But if you no show you will have your post cut in half. You Must Vote in 2 other battles after you post yours or you will be DQ’d and will have your post cut in half. Check In’s Due Before Tuesday March 15 Verses Due Before Thursday March 17 First to 3 Votes Win’s.. 2-0 = KO Remember, everything is in Pacific Time. If you do not know what that is then too bad. Topic:OutCast (or how ever you spell it) |
check in now and 30 linex max...
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Whoa! Given Light..........i Think You Got Your Wish, Lol...i'mma Kill You Nikkah :laugh: G-luck My Friend :thumbup: |
o yeah checking in.......................................
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LoL word @ this, damn at the topic, but we will see, we will definetly see.
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Definitions of outcast: · noun: a person who is rejected (from society or home) · adjective: excluded from a society Walking down the streets, beaten, bloody and bruised What happened, just now, how did I just get fooled…. WHY did they take advantage of me, to make me feel … make me feel like shit, so they could prove they were real… .................................................. .......... Rambling along a street, by myself, no others with me It’s raining solid, at least my tears are covered So no one can see how badly I’m impaired, my heart flees For so long, my fucking emotions were tethered.. Someone bit into my flesh, and tore around with they teeth I’m wearing four layers, yet I’ve been arctic forever No, I can see through everyone, resembling a colossal glass sheet People believing the infomercials, creating something completely fictional, left in the abyss, they’re minds stalling Conform if you will, who cares, when you have a stolen Identity The medias skill, taking lives of the innocent, fucking brainwashing .................................................. ........................ But look what happens, I haven’t talk to god in so long You become someone who is unknown to society The Goths are hated, the punks claim to be full of complexity Are they though? If you don’t do right, it’s automatically wrong.. .................................................. ...................... Undeniable problems arise from the simplest of things I wish I could fly, but I’d be called a freak with wings To soar above the problems that someone like me faces Having more than one style of living, tied up in a knot, like shoe laces Refusal to swing just one way, not homosexually, but mentally My mind is open to more than just one thought, especially Those of the children who speak in tongues, but the same language don’t you get it you fools, were all different but we hold the same baggage God’s light is spreading through the different to show our proud pasts That’s why I am proud to stand out, and be Jesus’ Outcast. |
MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ i thought you get off school early?? Well you have about 7 hours n 30 minutes before deadline
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Bitch Fuck You And Your Fucking Deadline, Lol. I'll Make It. Fucking Herb Mod. Lol J/k |
How it happen-
I dont know, maybe it was the first time when my mother put me on the porch I was crying my tears out, looking for hope, A man picked me up then put me close to his chest Hearing his heart beat made my sorrow disappear, My love for women slowly torch That's when i fell in love with men, Cause i wanted to feel that sensation that i had, non other less . . I just love a men's touch, Hands, Fingers, and lips, but it's the heart that i'm fondly sacred to The way, that my father treated me, with care, trusting and mostly love i want that from another man I do admire beauty from a women, but it's their heart that i'm disgust by, made me feel so blue I blame my mother for this, for thou she show me the Darkest behavior in all women brains . . I also blame my mother for giving me this life, cause it's hard, i really dont want to live in it As i sit in a corner on my knees crying, it was the effect of me being gay i was disgusy by..shit Effect I feel like a ninja turtle with out NORMAL friends, just stuck with my own kind I used to hang with dudes, until i broke the darkest new's. They insulted me After that my heart was tooked by the insult, everyday, every inch i'm losing my pride Bloody lips, wet eyes, dried up tears is left on my cheek, look what they did to thee. . . i get so uncomfortable when girls come up to me and ask "are you gay?" i reply "yes" Then thier face turn disgust, stomach get's ached, and my heart just gets broken in pieces The worst thing was i can't go to heaven, the bible says gay people go to hell and perish I respect god, for thou now i'm an outcast. Not gods prophet. My dead soul will never grow wings . . As i sit near my bed with my boyfriend looking nervously at the bible, then i hold it grasp in my hand I Look through the window, one of the darkest night is showing, Throws the bible and As i stand i hear the bible pages flap. Outcast My life is officially over, I've been beaten up because i was gay also not going to heaven too Through my life cycle i've been removed as god prophets, and from many women views I'm now in a dark corner with other people, with no light shining on us,that made us feel so blue I've learned that if you want to be loved then you have to pay some dangerous measurez to get thru. VOTE ON ALL ASPECTS (IMAGINARY, EMOTION) :thumbup: |
aight yo this was a good battle. damn u two. made me wait till the tourny to see this battle even though yall been talkin shit to each other for months. lol. any way.
Given Light. Your verse started off kinda slow and then got up to what u standardly drop. i hate that every other rhyme scheme, just cant get it to flow right in my head, so i just forgot about the fact if it rhymed or not and went soley to the deepness of your words. and there was nothin i could really see goin on there. its like u had the Outcast topic down but i really couldnt see u being an outcast. you just showed that u understood the word very cleary. but i will say that i loved your ending verse. favorite line was: Undeniable problems arise from the simplest of things I wish I could fly, but I’d be called a freak with wings<<<<shit was hella nice. Mista Authentiq. you was exactly the opposite of him. but it seemed like yall styles was cloned from one another. lol. but what i mean by opposite is i liked ya beggining a lot then towards the ending i started losing interest. also u made me see the things you would be going through. I hope they were fake. :thumbup: but the whole concept of being a depressed outcast wasthere Favorite line: just love a men's touch, Hands, Fingers, and lips, but it's the heart that i'm fondly sacred to The way, that my father treated me, with care, trusting and mostly love i want that from another man<<<<scary but it was my favorite. Overall. these verses was exactly the same to me. yall mustve started topicals at the same time or something. GL had more Emotion to me but Mista Authentiq had more imagery. so i look to the topic. and the only reason i'm giving this to Mista is cause he gave details on why he is an outcast. i just like story type topicals. so that may just be me. so... Vote... Mista Authentiq |
ahhh, this was a close battle.....both, i've seen better, but still not a bad battle
given....i thought you were weak at the start, you had a good idea, i was feeling the intro, great imagery, emotion....but then the middle of your piece wasnt as consistent and i felt you kinda wavered a little, but you picked up again in your last verse, which is what separated you two....i was feeling alot, you had the right amount of vocab which is good, your metaphors really drew nice images to go by, and i thought that was your strongest point....emotion, coulda been better, but still was decent mista....i thought your approach was too obvious, and i didn't like how you worded alot of your lines, which is what really turned me off from your piece.....you had better emotion, but alot of lines, your vocab kinda ruined your imagery, like repeating words too much kinda weakens your piece....but still not a bad drop you both had good structure and flow, emotion was about the same....just i felt given's had more imagery and just appealed to me more.....so, my vote goes to... v/given light |
^^ Omfg Imaginary!?.............are You Fucking Serious?....................
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man, it was a close battle, and thats what i thought it came down to, and that is a big part of writing, and i thought he had more, fuck
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need to re-read that mane...........But w.e...............
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no beef.... wun.
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