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The Feeling Of Rejection (Great Metaphor's)
The Feeling Of Rejection My heart completly stopped... But still feel the blood rushing through my vein's a million times faster... The World At Complete Silence... Traffic lights are green... But car's completely still... Plane's float in air thirty-thousand feet above the ground as if it was a helicopter... The time stay's at 8:03 A.M.... After thirty minutes have already passed... Can still hear the word Which is the cause of all this.. All my hope's shattered into pieces... As if a mirror was hit by one tiny rock... A new lake added to the city... Covering all of San Fransisco made by one person... Hunger for food fade's away... While the hunger for love increase's... All because of one single word... No! -Chris Dabatos 12/06/03 *This is not Jackie* |
That Was Pretty Good I Think Your Shorty Will Own You But That Had Nice Emotion Did Jackie Reject You?lol.anyways You Need To Give More Descritive Images By Using Metaphores They Are The Heart Of Poetry
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u need to battle me and stop ducking like a pussy
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